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Honey Dew [Final]


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Roleplay Type:World of Equestria RP

Name:Honey "Water Wings" Dew

Sex:Female

Age:Filly

Species:Pegasus

Eye Color:Yellow-Brown; Can also be described as honey colored

Coat Color:very dark blue

Mane/Tail/Markings Color & Style:light blue,incredibly thick, flowing, long

Physique:Tall,Graceful, Average weight

Cutie Mark:Eighth note surrounded by water-like swirls

Origin/Residence:Gallopagus Islands

Occupation:Marine Scientist; Helps keep the oceans clean, Cares for animals

Motivation:Loved to fly since she was a foal. Would sing Unfortunately she lost her ability to fly after a horrible tropical storm. She later learned to love swimming.

Likes:Water, Reminiscing about her days of flight, Singing, Marine life

Dislikes: Lightning, Being called "flightless bird", Seeing others cry

Character Summary Honey Dew was born to two Weather Pegasus in Stalliongrad. She played happily in the snow for most of her foalhood until she finally learned to fly. She dreamed of becoming a weather Pegasus throughout her whole childhood. Honey graduated as one of the best fliers in her class. However, she left without a cutie mark. Honey was continuously called a blank flank. To pursue a career better career and escape ridicule she left the frigid land of Stalliongrad and settled in the Gallopagus Islands. There she managed to be one of the few young Fillies accepted as an apprentice for the weather ponies. Honey was so excited to be accepted. Every morning she flew happily over the ocean, creating glimmering patterns of sea foam and churning gentle waves. Flying was her passion, until she got caught in one of the high grade storms.

Honey was hit by a large tree branch. She fell to the ground and tried to get back up. A searing pain shot up her shoulder and she realized that her left wing was damaged. After weeks with no recovery Honey was forced out of her apprenticeship with the weather ponies. Honey searched for a new teacher. Many doors were slammed in her face due to her lack of a mark. Still, losing her affinity was worse than anything she could ever imagine. One day Honey had slipped into a realm of despair. She went outside of her beachside cottage and took a walk along the rippling waves. She reminisced her days of soaring high in the sky. Those days ended before her life had truly began.

Honey recalled the free feeling of air whipping through her mane. She remembered droplets kissing her coat. Suddenly she began to sing a lullaby her mother taught her as a foal. "Sweet sweet wings above air, above sky, pouring down, down comes the rain". She sang with an open heart. The ocean seemed to sing with her. The waves danced upon the glistening shore. Fish jumped in the air, reaching vainly and blissfully for the sun. Honey looked upon the water and felt a flip in her chest. She found her new passion. An eight note formed on her flank. It was surrounded in wild, colorful swirls. The newly created mark appeared to be luminous in the sunlight. Honey found her calling in life.

Honey Finally obtained the mark. It took a while, but she now had one and that was all that mattered. Ponies began to look at her through a new lens. She was no longer the soaring blank flank, but a filly with much potential.

Edited by SillyFilly
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It looks as though your character didn't receive her cutie mark until she was an adult because it's stated that she graduated from school without it. As a young filly, she would still be in school, and most certainly wouldn't be working as a weather pony, since the only occupations for foals/fillies/colts is either as a student or as an apprentice or a helper for some store or craft. On that same note, she wouldn't be a full-on marine scientist as a filly; but she could be an apprentice on the way to becoming one.

Other than needing to clear up that bit of confusion, this character is looking pretty cool. One thing I would suggest, but isn't required, to make your summary easier to read, is that you add an extra return after the last sentence in each paragraph, so they're a little more spaced out.

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