Bronynumber299 Posted March 12, 2012 Report Share Posted March 12, 2012 Roleplay Type:ManeName:Brown LilySex:FemaleAge:MareSpecies:Earth PonyEye Colour:RedCoat Colour:PeachMane/Tail Markings & Style:Her mane is very light brown and styled like derpy's.Her tail is a little messy and long and matches her mane.Physique:NormalCutie Mark:Map with a Lily on itOrigin/Residence:Origin is outskirts of ponyville.She lives on the road/she travels.Occupation:She is a botonist and gardener.Motivation:She wants to the very best gardener and wants to see everything there is to see.After she wants to settle doen in a very rural place like ponyville.Character Summary:Personality:Brown Lily is very kind and helps every pony.She does gardening because she loves to help ponies but loves plants more.She travels all over the world so she is smart Geography ways.She also likes to see new things.But she dosn't like to try new things.Brown Lily makes money by doing odd jobs here and there and showing her botonist results with scientests.And of course she she is a gardener for a few ponies she met on her travels.Brown Lily has no garden though that's why she tends to other ponies gardens.Brown Lily never really got over her odd fear of birds.She is terrified of them this failure only sets her back though and it frustrates her sometimes but she tries to keep it inside.Brown Lily has met many ponies on her travels and she considers them her friends.She was homeschooled because her parents thought it was better that way and didn't want her to learn "useless stuff".Brown Lily is afraid of birds because one day she was walking around and exploring when she was very young.A chicken attacked her and wouldn't stop until her mother chased it off with a spoon.The chicken scratched her up pretty bad.And she has saw many vultures feeding.Family:She owns a dog.And her brother is a big canterlot gaurd and her parents live on a small farm.She sometimes vists her parents but her brother is much too busy.History:She used to be very poor living on a turnip farm.But she decided to travel right after she got her cutie mark which she got very late.Her parents didn't like Lily to go but they knew it was her destiny.Cutie Mark Story:Brown Lily was down in the dumps because she didn't have her cutie mark so she went to the forest where she went when she wanted some alone time.Lily found a lily and saw more plants she has never seen and started exploring the forest.She loved the plants and the scenery and wanted more she needed to travel.Brown Lily started to try gardening and exploring more of the forest the next couple of weeks.It took her a long time to perfect her gardening but good thing itwas one of the things that her parents taught her in homeschool.There we go. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
MyLittlePonyTales Posted March 14, 2012 Report Share Posted March 14, 2012 Hmm... you've got a good start, but your pony is a Mare! There should be more to the Application.Cutie Mark Story:Brown Lily was down in the dumps because she didn't have her cutie mark so she went to the forest where she went when she wanted some alone time.Lily found a lily and saw more plants she has never seen and started exploring the forest.She loved the plants and the scenery and wanted more she needed to travel.Brown Lily started to try gardening and exploring more of the forest the next couple of weeks.Then when she perfected her gardening and finished exploring the forest she found her cutie mark.This doesn't sound too bad, but when did she start gardening? She explored the forest and discovered plants, and then all of a sudden she's a master gardener! You seem to be missing a bit here.What about her parents? How do they feel about their daughter striking out on her own? Did they have any exceptions for her? Is she close to her brother? Does she ever visit him or her parents? How does she make money? She's a traveler and a gardener, so it doesn't really make sense that she would have a permanent garden if she doesn't have a permanent residence. What things has Brown Lily failed at? Did that failure in life make her sad or make her stronger, or both? How did it affect her then, and how does it affect her today, if at all? Did Brown Lily ever go to school, or was she homeschooled? Did she have any friends? Has she made any friends on her journey?Alrighty, there are a lot of questions to get you going and help you flesh out the character and the Application. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
MyLittlePonyTales Posted March 17, 2012 Report Share Posted March 17, 2012 If a comment is not made saying you would like to keep this character, it will be removed in 5 days. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Bronynumber299 Posted March 17, 2012 Author Report Share Posted March 17, 2012 I would like to keep this character please I was off the internet because it was down where I was sorry. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
SunsetSombra Posted March 18, 2012 Report Share Posted March 18, 2012 Here's a couple of things I figure may be worth looking at with regards to this application at this junction:1: Brown Lily never really got over her odd fear of birds.She is terrified of them this failure only sets her back though and it frustrates her sometimes but she tries to keep it inside.Is there an explanation as to why she's afraid of birds? This is a chance to really add an interesting spin on the characters backstory, so I would perhaps think of adding something more to this so that it doesn't just feel like a cheap fear, but a legitimate part of who this pony is and how it possibly affects them.2: it was one of the things that her parents taught her in homeschool. I suppose I'm curious as to why, in a world such as equestria where the schools seem to do an ALREADY excellant job and are nothing like real world schools, anypony would still prefer to homeschool their kids. Is there a particular reason to this, or was this just extra studies at home that the parents wanted her to learn?For the most part, I don't see a great deal else that could hold it up, but I figure that these couple of things may need a slight revision to help get this moving on it's way! Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
MyLittlePonyTales Posted March 21, 2012 Report Share Posted March 21, 2012 How is this Application coming along? Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Bronynumber299 Posted March 21, 2012 Author Report Share Posted March 21, 2012 I hope it's good. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
SunsetSombra Posted March 23, 2012 Report Share Posted March 23, 2012 Yeah, I think we'll work just fine with this! Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Skye Posted March 24, 2012 Report Share Posted March 24, 2012 Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Bronynumber299 Posted March 24, 2012 Author Report Share Posted March 24, 2012 THANK YOU!!!!!!!!!!! Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
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