CrimsonNova Posted April 14, 2012 Report Share Posted April 14, 2012 I think that your motivation may be a bit broad and impersonal. I'd like to see a personal goal in place of that one, if you can think of it. Maybe something like "To overcome her shyness and insecurities."I have quickly fixed this up - thanks. Your story was a really impressive read, fun and detailed. I did have one quick question. If Spitfire offered to train her personally, despite her shyness I still think she would feel joy and pride. Instead of putting herself down in front of her idol, I think that she would feel honored and probably thank him instead. Of COURSE she would feel a bit embarrassed, but imagine being personally trained by your hero! What an honor!I did think about that, actually, but I wanted to show just how insecure she was about herselfDid you ask permission to be a Wonderbolt, considering they are canon characters? Just checking, so that you don't get in any trouble.I did in fact clear this up with Tales beforehand, just in case. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
SunsetSombra Posted April 18, 2012 Report Share Posted April 18, 2012 Looks like team WONDERBOLTS are taking off agaaaaaaaain! Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
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brianblackberry Posted April 18, 2012 Report Share Posted April 18, 2012 For Great Justice! Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
CrimsonNova Posted April 18, 2012 Author Report Share Posted April 18, 2012 Tehehe - oh my gosh, thank yoou! Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
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