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  1. Trilobite
    Chapter 1: The Tower The trees were bent, dark, and gnarled, ancient evergreens curved with the relentless wind. They clung tenaciously to upthrusts of rock, sheltering lichen and shrubs in their roots as ice-laden wind hissed through their stout boughs. Water, dark as tarnished silver, lapped against the shores of their rocky islands, and under the howling of the wind was the constant creaking of ice floes and the occasional sharp crack of a calving sheet. The low clouds were cut by a strange shape that moved against the wind, trailing a wake of falling mist behind it. The Polar Star struggled northward, her pegasus-built keel finding tenuous purchase on the icy stormclouds. Her hot air envelope's bright colors were dulled by the ice that formed over every surface, weighing her down, and crews of stalwart ponies in bulky cold-weather clothing were visible everywhere, tirelessly clearing the ice. “Tower ho!” Salt Spray's call was nearly lost in the wind. Cleverboots looked up from her work on the wings, one hoof going instinctively to her safety line. Behind the slit snow-goggles, her eyes narrowed as they peered into the mist. There! Looming out of the icy grayness! A tall, slender tower, projecting up above the clouds on which the ship sailed. Ancient decorations of beautiful, but strange design could be faintly seen, along with winged forms circling the distant shape. Cleverboots began hauling herself back up to the deck. She took the time to be careful. After three weeks with the crew she knew she could trust them to handle things properly until she arrived, and they knew she would be there shortly.
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    Awesome! Very nice story-telling in the introductions. Thanks, gentlefolk! First part of the adventure thread is up! --- CREW OF THE POLAR STAR Salt Spray: Blue earth pony, experienced sailor, 3rd in command. Cutie Mark: a curling wave. Silver Lining: Grey-and-white pegasus. Ship's healer and counselor. Cutie Mark: a cloud with a silver lining!
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    Parhelion started to answer Star Storm, then the commotion caught his attention. He looked up, spotted the Princess, and his eyes shot wide open. Almost as quickly, he knelt into the deepest of bows, forelock nearly brushing the soil. "Princess!" he squeaked.
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    Excellent. I shall keep mine eyes peeled.
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    No problem! I like the idea of this character, especially paired with a sibling who is very much her opposite in personality. There's a couple minor typos, but otherwise this looks like a solid start for an application. I especially like the Cutie Mark! I'm really curious: how did she end up in her 'profession' as it were, and when did she realize how much she loved helping others to succeed and supporting them?
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    Oh noes! If you can give me a link, I'll look it over and see if anything can be done about that.
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    Before Canterlot, before Equestria, before even the Princesses, ponies lived in a distant land now spoken of only in stories told at Hearth's Warming Eve and other holidays. Strife among ponies, and the cold fury of the Windigos, buried this land forever in ice and shrouded it in the mists of history. Some say that this land is nothing more than a legend, a parable. But Cleverboots, once considered one of the brightest historians of all Equestria, is convinced that this land was--is--real, and that it can be found. Her peers may mock her, but Cleverboots is sure of the evidence she has gathered, and has staked what remains of her academic reputation, along with her considerable family fortune, on an expedition to the frozen north. In this blasted, white wilderness, she and the brave crew of the revolutionary Polar Star search for secrets long lost, determined to uncover the truth for all of Equestria to learn from. --- This is the OOC section for "The Voyage of the Polar Star", a place for table talk, banter, asking questions, making rolls (if we need to) and plotting against the GM. I'm your humble host, Trilobite. The friendship bucket (see below) stands at 1D. First up are the stars of our story, their characters linked to below:
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    Oh, I agree that the character is very clear and really well-written (and I totally agree with show, don't tell). I'm just uncertain as to whether that 'motivation' section needs to be filled in for it to be considered as a 'final' application or not. More a formality than because something is missing from the character--nothing is! Heck, you could probably move this over to 'Final' and see what folks have to say about it, then fill in something if it's required.
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    Parhelion nodded his agreement, then asked; "So tell me a little about yourself, Star Storm. You know my life story, such as it is. How about yours?"
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    Excellent! The motivation sounds good to me, and more importantly it sounds like you have a good grasp on what drives this little fellow. I might suggest copying and pasting some what you wrote above directly into the motivation section and calling it good!
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    Parhelion pursed his lips thoughtfully. His parents had typically been direct and frank with him, he saw no reason to do differently with this filly. "Of course! She is pretty pretty," he said with a chuckle. "I mean, I wouldn't just walk up to her and ask for a kiss, but seeing as how this is a special occassion, you bet I'm looking forward to it." He worked to straighten his mane and took a moment to pop a couple of mints into his mouth before offering one to Star Storm. "Not that you need one, but I was taught it's polite to offer."
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    Parhelion shook his head to clear it. "Wow. Okay. Ponyville sure is...interesting. Anyway, Star Storm, I have to agree that chocolate milk is pretty awesome. And we'll definitely have a bunch there. Hey, if you have friends of family in town you'd be welcome to bring them, too."
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    No problem.
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    Parhelion starts to reply, but Pinkie's exclamation brings him up short and he just stares blankly, totally lost.
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    Woot! Looking good. I love the backstory you filled in there, which seems to have a very personal tone, as in, to feels as though it's really the story of a character's life. I think you may be missing motivation still, and there might be a type or two in the backstory (like hebis instead of he is) but honestly I don't know how important the latter is. Otherwise the whole thing is really solid and I think this will be a great character.
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    Parhelion snorts. "Well, of course. What else would you drink at something like this? I know a lot of ponies say it doesn't go with everything but they. Are. Wrong." He eyes the smaller pegasus suspiciously. "Wait...how do you feel about, for example, peanut butter?"
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    Right on! I shall be watching you...I mean, uh, this application.
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    Hmm..there is a weekend coming up...good time for some people to finish applications...
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    Star Storm's laugh was infectious, and Parhelion found himself giggling along with her and grinning like a fool. "Oh..oh, wow. Okay, okay..." he said, wiping a tear from his eye. "Well, that's okay then. She's pretty..." he stopped, looked down at the young filly he was speaking too, and cleared his throat. "Pretty. She's pretty pretty. I won't mind getting a kiss at all. Really, though, I came for the apples. My mom's baking a bunch of...well, a bunch of all kinds of stuff. She does it every year, and this year is a special anniversary of it, or one of her friend's anniversaries, or birthdays, or something. Anyway. Point is, there'll be all kinds of goodies, apple pie not the least. You should come by! It's the day after tomorrow, out at the big hall by the Cloudiseum. Lotta good food and a lotta good ponies."
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    "Waitwaitwait wait wait wait. Wait. What? I thought I was---okay, hold on, I---oh! Okay, okay, it's a...a sales...deal...bonus...thing. Buy a barrel of apples, get a kiss?" He looks around and leans in to the blue pegasus, stage-whispering. "Is Applejack that big stallion, because I might just pass on the kiss..."
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    "I'm from Cloudsdale myself! Well, Stalliongrad these days--I moved up there for a post as a weatherpony, but I still come back to see my family in the summers. My mother was also really inistent that I arrange the pickup of apples from this farm, and when I see this huge line I guess she was why. Um, right, I mean. Do you know why? They seem like good ponies, but do they have special...breeds? Of apples or something?" The gray pegasus sighs heavily and rolls his eyes at himself. "Goodness, I'm all out of sorts today. My name's Parhelion. Nice to meet you."
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    This was a great event. Thanks a lot to everyone who helped make this happen--and congrats to all my fellow participants for putting on a good show!
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    Everything seemed to be in order again, so a rather confused-looking Parhelion stepped back into line. He turned to Star Storm, behind him. "Is it always like this in Ponyville?"
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    Huzzah!
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    Parhelion looked over as the big pegasus, apparently named Dunder, and another pegasus joined him and Muggo. He gave a friendly smile and polite nod, but waited to introduce himself, as the three seemed to be old friends.
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