Dunder

Because you hate us! D:

It is? D: Sorry....>_< Never heard of it XD

You fixed a lot of the problems from before, but you also created a new one D: The town of Marelia is not a part of the Mane board canon either, so your character cannot be from there. Unfortunately, we cannot keep track of all the new places people would make up in their OC's background, so we need you to choose one of the cities from The board canon World of Equestria.

Dunder smiled as Midnight spoke to him. He barely knew her and she was already willing to take his side if things turned bad. Something more had to be behind it, he wasn't sure what, though. Anyway, she felt confident enough to stand up and tell him to quick his dramatic talk, though it was a serious thing. "I'm not hoping I will need to get left behind, just if it happens.... You all are my responsibility anyway." He said, and it appeared he was doing a bad enough job with all the injuries with the exception of her. He hoped it didn't change. He was interrupted when Muggo' hit him lightly with a hoof. Dunder was on edge, so he jumped and backed away from Muggo'. "Drag me by my tail and I'll go to your pub and spit in your ale!" He teased back before following, he galloped beside Midnight and behind Dusty, Muggo, and Winter as they made their way through the tunnels. It seemed like they didn't know where they were going, he just hoped Dusty knew what he was doing. Meanwhile, the griffin glanced around the front cave for the ponies and they all were gone. She tried to keep herself calm even though she was furious on the inside. She pointed at the cave where they had obviously made their escape, it being the only on she was out of line of sight with. "Go! Now! After the ponies! Whoever brings them back gets a pay and food raise! Go! Now!" She commanded them. They did her bidding, all of them chasing after her and the two other griffins behind.

If he disappeared, she could still go look for him.

He could just not have been driven out. Maybe he just disappeared on an adventure or something and her mom started to date the Royal Guardspony.

The dad's backstory is a little grimdark still and out of the show's nature.... Perhaps, instead of her dad dead, he was never seen again? And maybe for a different reason than being in a conspiracy group?

Dunder was back in Canterlot. He wanted to do a job, something, anything as long as it was exciting and preferably with a pony he knew. Canterlot was a good place to start, a lot of nobles could spend money on other ponies to do the dirty work for them, and Dunder was alright with that as long as he was getting paid and getting paid fairly. He was drifting around Canterlot, his hooves and head hanging down as his wings flapped and as he scanned the crowd. Seeing a poster or a pony with a sign or something would be a blessing, but he didn't expect what he saw next. The mare who he had danced with at the Hoedown in Appleoosa. He suddenly perked up and and smiled, "CANDY!" He said happily, not caring about the pompous nobles's stares as he cried out in glee. He swooped down and tackled her to the ground before giving her a big hug and a nuzzle on the neck, "Candy! It's so good to see you. What are you doing in Canterlot?" He asked with a wide smile, excited to see a familiar face.

This part is too grimdark, ponies don't abuse eachother, especially mares carrying a foal.

Awesome

Dunder shook hie head as she spoke again of the bits that she used to buy the dress. "No... it's fine." He said to her. Before he was bothered by it, since he wanted her to use it on something that would help her survive instead of look good. But now, it was all behind them, and she was happy and successful and they were not in love. He just nuzzled her cheek softly. "Hmmm....I feel the same." He said in response to her talking about her purchasing nature. "Anyway, I have plenty of bits to spend, and I might as well spend them." He said and gave her a smile.

Dunder wasn't looking forward to renovating this place, by the sounds of it, it sounded like it would be easier to just start from scratch, but he wasn't going to tell Swift that. And all these sad stories were making him even feel more uncomfortable. A battlemage who died along and a brilliant doctor who died, and obviously left Fire heartbroken. When he saw her looking at him, with a defeated and sad look on her face, he just wrapped a wing around her tightly and kissed her cheek softly, "Don't worry about it...." He said and smiled. That's when he looked back up at Swift, after he did some talking, the unicorn pulled out the longsword to slash and hack at the bushes. Dunder only concentrated on his sloppy form and bad stance, but he didn't say anything. Later, he would though, maybe if Fire wasn't around. But she was also a mare who knew how to fight pretty well.... Dunder trotted up to Swift, and kicked the back of one of his front legs, making him shift weight from his back to his front. Then kicked another leg to widen his stance. He looked him up and down before nodding, "There, that's a better stance." He said with a smile.

I was thinking Dunder would be there either after seeing a poster, or seeing Candy put up the posters and they talked. Then he decided that he'd spend some time with his friend and then he gets on the airboat with her... and you know the rest

The Application is looking pretty good so fat, but one thing is a gaping problem with the Application. The Empyrea is not part of the Mane canon, so your character can not be affiliated with them unless this will be a crossover character. There are other options, though, remember that there is the Royal Equestrian Army and the Holy Destriers. But, also remember that the point of the organizations is not for warfare, but to have the military culture.

Dunder was starting to sweat, things were going bad for him. The mare didn't seem at all happy with him, even though he helped her. The way he saw it, she was just being ungrateful or something. After all he did go out of his way and get injured to help her, maybe he could talk out of it. He knew that he'd need to be crafty about it. But, he was cut off from his thinking when he was suddenly glared and yelled at by the angry grey mare. "No. I am not a mercenary..." He admitted and hug his head. "And I have no permit... Please, I carry it around only for personal defense. I only helped you and my record is clean." He said before taking a few steps towards her, he was within hoof range. "Maybe we can clear all of this up at the station." He said. He was larger than Argenta, but not by much. He never really got a good look at her until now. Again, thoughts of escaping by making a run for it ran through his mind, but he pushed them off, feeling the anxiety already of running away.

You did good.

Not really, you could just join... maybe Candy put up some posters to get some more ponies to help or something.

I'd suggest checking out both boards, Mane and Crossovers, to see which one you'd like to use more. Mane is a lot more active, but Crossovers is more free.

I'm in, as discussed.

Deadpool is incorrect. Weapons are allowed in the mane RP. Usually swords and no firearms. But remember that your pony would probably never be using the weapon. And the weapons are more of a martial art tool than a fighting tool.

Yes, you can make a changeling Make it a crossover app and it is a creature. Perhaps read some of the other changeling apps to get some ideas or clarifications if you have any questions.

This app is looking pretty good. Adventurer ponies are always in use on the boards, as adventures always are going on and people just make more. But some things need to be straightened out first. Some big, some small. 1) The residence field is confusing. You say Cloudsdale/Ponyville but have no explanation on how that is. Also, it is not suggested that ponies live in Ponyville, there is an overpopulation there. So out of the two, I'd say to pick Cloudsdale. 2) The history in the character summary needs some more attention. It tells almost nothing about her life, and that's what it's there for. Some more information on her foalhood and fillyhood. How her parents affected her, how other fillies and colts affected her fillyhood, how she grew more and more love and interest for storms and map making and adventuring. Also, some information on where she is now in her life, how she feels and how she thinks about herself and how she decided to live in Cloudsdale. It seems as though your flaws/successes section explains more about this than her actual summary. Possibly using the flaws and successes section and putting it into the history would work. And then explaining more about her flaws and about strengths in less of a specific and more of a general sense. Like, instead of just flight school, maybe flying and running and determination in general and how it was shown through her personality. 3) The cutie mark story needs some more explanation. It seemed like we got only the second half of it. Did her parents let her go out, or did she sneak out? Why did she get lost. What did she use to draw the map, was she ready or did she need to improvise?

Dunder payed attention to the instructions Blueblood gave them. He knew that at least he could be the pony who kept them all on track, after all he truest himself the most out of all of them. Not saying that they were irresponsible or untrustworthy, he'd trust all of them with the exception with Blueblood, that arrogant noble, with his life. It's just that he could trust himself to do almost anything, as his sword instructor's philosophy taught. Dunder looked at the horse'd'oeuvers as they were served to them. Dunder, unlike this unicorn, couldn't use magic. He just grabbed a couple in his fetlock and thanked the waiter with a smile and nod and "thank you." He ate the food that was served slowly. He tried to remember his manners, not to burp, he never chewed loudly, and he tried to eat it the correct way like Blueblood with the telekinesis, but he had to just eat it with his hoof. The pegasus stallion, chewed slowly, just looking at the table as the wine was served. He couldn't even look at it, he was still mildly embarrassed about what he did last time he tried to drink wine. It wasn't his fault that the drink tasted so horrible. He sat back in his chair before giving the other oderve he got from the waiter to Muggo, he looked at the stallion "eat it, it tasted pretty good." He lied. It actually tasted bland, a taste that fancy ponies somehow got accustomed to. "Anyway, I'm pretty full as it is." He lied again. He was pretty hungry. He wanted this food to get over now so they could start eating. No-pony seemed to be saying anything either, so maybe strike up some conversation and useful information for the adventure. He looked over at Blueblood, and looked him straight in the eye. "So, Blueblood. You're a noble, right? I suppose you know how to wield a blade?" He asked casually, like he had been any other pony.

Dunder was ready to collapse from the pain in his chest after he saw the sword tie up the chains and disable the hammer, rendering the Germane pony useless. Dunder had to settle for sitting heavily on his rump. He sighed and tried to take deep and slow breaths. The cracked ribs were starting to get to him, maybe the injury was worse than he thought it was. He didn't look up at the others while they talked, instead he took off his hat, still breathing heavily as he wiped some sweat from his brow with the back of his fetlock. He looked up suddenly when the name of his second nationality came up in the conversation. He was putting his hat back on as he looked up, surprised at the Germane stallion. "What? Why would I be taken in?" He asked before coughing once lightly, but then the pony slammed her hoof down and he was quiet. He couldn't fly away in the cold without exhorting himself. And he can't run too far without exhorting himself either... and the last thing he wants is a bounty on his head for running from a patrol mare or even engaging in combat with one. He took the rapier out from under him, and after a second of looking at it, he threw it, handle first at the patrol mare. "Fine.... Just remember I helped you with that swing-happy idiot ready to tear a whole street apart." He said before getting up on all fours.