Pegasus Adagio Acapella

[Shayua Haise]

Name: Adagio Acapella

Gender: Male

Age: Young Stallion

Species: Pegasus

Pelt Color: Light Gray

Mane/Tail Color & Style: Crimson. Short, spiked mane. Long, well groomed tail.

Eye Color: Emerald

Cutie Mark: Green Bass Clef

Physique: Thin for a pony, taller than average.

Residence: Hoofington

Occupation: Singer/performer

Motivation: Adagio is a lover of music. He sings to express the sorrow of others, while also telling their tale.

Likes: Learning about other people, listening to and singing soft, slow tempo music.

Dislikes: Ungrateful ponies, being separated from, or isolated with people for long periods of time.

Character Summary:

Adagio has a surprisingly deep voice, for his size, and speaks in a slow, meaningful way. He sometimes sings his words, as a way to give them emphasis and passion. When walking, he strides with his neck straight and his head held high. When he flies, he tends to be called "Slow", though he regards his flight as "Deliberate". Everything he does he turns into a way to express himself. The light build of a pegasus allows Adagio to draw breath easier, and the exercise of flying has strengthened his lungs, allowing him to sing louder, for longer, without running out of breath and tiring.

Adagio helps others when he can, but knows that one must help themselves before they can help others. He feels that he should give freely of himself to those less fortunate than him, in hopes that it'll get them to the point where they no longer need to rely on others. He explains his reasoning by saying, "If I were in their situation, I'd want the same done for me."

Adagio, from a young age, had a love for music. When he was a foal, music would calm him if he were cranky or upset, primarily his mother singing to him. As a young colt in Hoofington, he had a hard time focusing in school. The monotonous lessons of history and the like bored him to no end, as they contained no passion, and he spent the time humming to himself and coming up with songs rather than actually listening. Because of this, he barely passed through school, and has been regarded as uneducated for most of his life. Though he isn't "dumb", he doesn't take any interest in most scholarly subjects.

Adagio dislikes being away from ponies for long periods of time. Being alone in his home for a day alone can make him bored out of his mind. However, he also dislikes being isolated with ponies for long periods of time. Tieing back to his need for interaction with other ponies, having only a small group to talk to makes him feel stifled, causing him to long for large groups of people to interact with and learn from. Traveling on ships has always been something Adagio hated, which is why he never considered becoming a sailor, like his Father.

Adagio's family was a long line of Pegasus travelers and sailors. Throughout the years, the family spread out across Equestria, becoming mingled with other families as social interaction took it's course. Most members of the family grew to become escorts, or transport personnel, such as sailors on a cargo ship, or members of a caravan. Still, a few of the recent generation began branching out and becoming a large number of occupations such as Aerial acrobats, or salesmen. However, no matter what the job, it always involved traveling, exploring, and meeting new people. This continues in Adagio, who now plans to travel across Equestria to the many cities and villages, including the more secluded areas such as Cloudsdale, with the help of his wings.

The family of travelers always had their wings to thank for a large part of their success. Those who were explorers managed to safely explore more dangerous territory by simply flying over it, and the sailors were always of important jobs, such as spotting weather formations out at sea, scouting the seas for nearby islands when exploring, or creating winds for the sails. Those who traveled to perform always traveled light, choosing to fly to their destination carrying only the clothes on their back and a bag of gold bits.

In the future, Adagio wishes to travel Equestria and possibly surrounding, occupied lands. Due to his father being lost at sea, he's forced to stay in and around the area of Hoofington, performing for the locals and travelers in order to make the wage needed to support an aging mare and a young filly, along with himself. His goal in life is to learn and spread the story of other people's struggles and hardships, while also spreading the story of his own people's despairs. He dreams of visiting each of the major cities of Equestria, and all of the minor villages, learning and composing songs from the people there, and then making the rounds again to spread them. He hopes one day to be invited to Canterlot to perform, but doesn't consider it a goal in his life.

Cutie Mark Chronicle:

Adagio was the last in his class to obtain his Cutie Mark. One day after school, Adagio was visiting his father on the docks. His father was a sailor out of Hoofington, and was away for long periods at a time, so the young colt wanted to spend as much time with his father as possible. Adagio knew his father's captain was planning to leave the next day, early in the morning, even though a large storm was scheduled by the weather pegasus. The elderly sailor explained that the storm would be nothing for his experienced crew, and they were already behind schedule. His father, however, had his doubts. The pegasus stallion, sporting a coat that was pitch black, with a mane and tail that were crimson and unkempt, had never been good with words, especially in situations like this. His father reassured him he'd be back, and reminded him that if he ever got lonely, to just remember their family's song.

The song was an old melody, unchanged through the years it had been told. It was told from the point of view of a Pegasus, a sailor or traveler of some kind with a family. It was slow, and contained a mixture of feelings. When a colt or stallion was taught the song, they knew in their hearts, that might be the last they see of their father.

Months later, Adagio saw no sign of his father. Surely, he had though, he was just delayed. He now knew he was wrong, and was coming to grips with the loss, though it wasn't easy. He spent his time at a quaint diner near the docks. He worked there five days a week to help the money saved up by his father last longer, though he wasn't sure how he'd provide for himself, his mother, and his little sister using only his small paycheck as a waiter.On his break, he sat and watched the performers on the small stage towards the back of the room. Singers, magicians, illusionists, dancers, and instrumental musicians performed for the small amount of money dished out to them, but Adagio could see past their fake smiles. He knew that smile all too well. The smile you give when you don't want others to know you're hurting. The performers hid the pain and walked off the stage with that same smile, accepting their money and leaving a little too quickly, as if they were in a hurry to get no where fast. A small band took the stage, composing of mostly string instruments such as a Contrabass, and a violin. In the middle of the stage was an old piano that was gathering dust from lack of use, but one of the three blew the dust off the top as he approached the center of the stage. The stallion, an older looking unicorn of blue coat and white mane, a mark on his flank resembling that of the draw curtains on a stage being drawn open, with a spotlight in the center, stepped forward with a smile. The stallion requested a volunteer. He explained that everyone has a story to tell, sometimes a story that words can't tell alone. Motioning to his band, he requested a volunteer come onto the stage and sing a song that told a story.

"It can be happy, sad, whatever you like. It just has to tell a story. You sing, and we'll accompany you."

After a few moments of complete silence, no one had risen to take up the challenge, and the white maned unicorn's smile faltered a bit. Just as he looked like he was going to say something, Adagio rose from his table and walked quietly over to the stage, almost without thinking. He stepped to the center of the stage and whispered the name of the song into the unicorn's ear.

He nodded, his smile fading slightly as he recalled the song most likely taught by another branch of Adagio's family from another town. He then turned back to his small group and discussed the song with them for a bit. Adagio stood at the center of the stage, facing the small crowd before him, and saw that all eyes were on him. After a quick nod from the unicorn with the piano, he turned to the crowd and nodded to them, closing his eyes for a moment. When he opened them again, he began his family's song. He was determined to tell his father's story to the people before him, if they would so listen, as was done before for countless stallions in his family. Half way through he felt a tingling in his gut, and faltered slightly, but continued as if nothing happened, and no one seemed to notice.

As the colt finished his song of Love, Life, and Loss, the group before him, which seemed significantly larger than he remembered, erupted into a cacophony of stomping hooves and whistling. Friends and family of lost sailors expressed pent up emotions with tears streaming down their face, and stomping of hooves. The old unicorn walked off the stage with his two friends, the two of them carrying their instruments with them as they collected their money, and continued out the door, just like the rest of the performers. Adagio was given a small amount of bits for the performance, the same amount each of the other three were given. Adagio took the small bag, mostly happy he had a big more money to last the week until his pay check, and left for the day, with the permission of his boss.

As he arrived at his house, he walked through the door, greeted by a gasp from his little sister, and a nod from his mother.

"I told you you'd get it sooner or later." His mother said, smiling softly.

Adagio looked down at his side and saw a dark green Bass Clef on his flank. He smiled inwardly after a few moments, upon realizing what his special talent was after all these years of wondering in school. He explained to his friend that it was the symbol for the lower half of the musical spectrum, that of a lower pitch.

Edit: I shortened his Cutie Mark Chronicle by taking out unnecessary information. I saved the old version and plan to fix it up, possibly extend it a bit, go into a bit more detail and possibly further back in Adagio's life, just for fun. If requested, I might post it in the writing section, we'll see how that goes.

This is my first character, I had come up with the idea for him when I was thinking of a character for a fiction I was planning to write. (I never wrote it.) Using the help of a random number generator and some input from friends, I came up with Adagio Acapella, the thin, deep voiced stallion from Stalliongrad who sings Opera. I decided to tweak him a bit for this, and he turned into the thin, deep voiced Pegasus stallion from Hoofington that sings the songs of those long passed. I think he's coming along nicely.

[ziddia]

I love the name

Your character looks good. Hopefully the Helpstaff give you the okay so I can RP with you

[Shayua Haise]

I love the name

Your character looks good. Hopefully the Helpstaff give you the okay so I can RP with you

Danke. I came up with it based off of how his singing was. A friend suggested he sing opera, and a male singing opera would typically be deep voiced and slow, thus "Adagio", which is a tempo meaning slow and restful. Acapella just means vocals without accompany of instruments.

Also, updated with his Cutie Mark Chronicle. Let me know how it looks.

[BlindJester]

It's looking good.

Well if you think you're comfortable with how everything is and want to have this app evaluated for approval you must remove the WIP tag. So we can discuss your character fully.

[Shayua Haise]

I don't see me adding any more backstory other than that, and I personally think it looks decent. I removed the WIP tag.

[MyLittlePonyTales]

What's the significance of Adagio being a Pegasus rather than and Earth pony or a Unicorn? Even ponies like Fluttershy, who is a Pegasus acts more like an Earth pony, uses her wings to aid her with birds. Her pony type still relates to her talent.

Also, how does the family survive now that their father/husband is gone? What do they do for income?

Did Adagio ever think about becoming a sailor like his father? Why or why not?

What does he hope to accomplish in his future?

A lot of the application is the Cutie Mark story, which isn't necessarily bad, it just doesn't always tell a lot about your character. But, you do have a few paragraphs that talk about his personality as well, I see. You've got a good start to this character, just could use a little expansion.

[Shayua Haise]

Update!

Added two new paragraphs to his profile, above his Cutie Mark Chronicle. Updated a bit of the story, explaining why he stays at the diner. Expanded his dislikes a bit to be more in depth. Updated first paragraph to explain his physique more.

[Skye]

As beautifully written as this is, a lot of it is very very close to fic material. I'd almost suggest chopping out the fic parts and saving it for that and just keeping the meat and potatoes of what you've detailed about Adagio himself, though this isn't necessarily a bad thing. Just a suggestion, as I think you've got quite a talent for writing and I'd hate to see this much work wasted on a profile piece.

I would like to point out what Tales has already mentioned, about the significance of him being a Pegasus rather than an Earth Pony or a Unicorn. Not that it's necessarily a bad thing, but it's a little unusual to have an Earth-Bound Pegasus without a good reason for it. As Rainbow Dash demonstrates, she lives in a cloud over Ponyville and is a big part of the weather team. Another character we have, Gravity, is earth-bound because of her size. Yet others are stuck because of gimpy wings or things like that. But Adagio seems a little out of place, along with his family. So I think I'd like a little bit as to why they chose Hoofington as their home and if or why, they're Earthbound. Was his father perhaps a weather spotter for the ship? Or perhaps a wind-maker? Something about him that maybe would suggest an advantage of having a pegasus as a ship crew member might be helpful. I don't say he can't be a Pegasus, but perhaps a notion of why they've chosen to make their residence there, as well as some details about it might be worthwhile.

Just to summarize, I'd consider taking the opportunity to truncate some of the extra you have here and put it aside for a full-length fic, and just keep the important and detailing components of his summary (Keep the idea of the Cutie Mark Chronicle, I like that!) and put in a little bit of detail as to why the choice of making himself and his family a pegasus. Other than those, I think he's about ready to go. I see the rest of this character seems to be in pretty good order. He's very well rounded and very detailed with the exception of those couple of minor things.

[Shayua Haise]

Thank you very much for your suggestions, I'll keep them in mind.

Edit: Cleared up what I had to do, got back to work on the profile. I copied his CMC over to a notepad on my desktop to save for later, in the event I decide to expand on it, and then shortened the one here to the best of my ability.

I added two new paragraphs to his character summary, explaining a bit of background for his family as well as himself. This hopefully answers the question as to how he uses his wings to help with his special talent, and why his family are Pegasus.

I also did some minor changes here and there that aren't really important, mainly reworded some things, fixed grammatical errors, the like.

Removed the WIP tag to signify that I'm ready for it to be evaluated again, but keep in mind I am still editing it as I come up with better ways to say things, and better ways to describe Adagio. I will add the tag back in the event more major work is suggested, or I find something important that I need time to fix.

Hope you like the changes!

[brianblackberry]

[ziddia]

Woo! Good job Shayua!

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[Skye]

I'm looking forward to seeing you write a fic with this much talent you display!