starswirlthebearded

Still unpacking. Every time I try and rp lately something happens. I'm going to aim for tomorrow. Just please don't expect much I'm more out of the swing of rping than anything else. Trying to get back into it now.

Great work Jane! I really see no problems with this! I'm going to pass this up the latter

Trekker had traveled to the northern city of Stalliongrad before. As she grew closer to the northern city, she donned her winter coat, and goggles in case she met any inclement weather on the way. She was answering the call for an experienced adventurer from a wealthy mare named "Snowfall." Apparently there was a rare and priceless lost treasure and a pony to be found. To be specific, the ad stated that the trinket was a priceless Aquellian relic that was stolen, and the pony was missing for unknown reasons. Though Trekker normally didn't travel in groups, a positive experience to Unyasi had helped Trekker grow more accustomed to the idea. And besides, if it was tracking, that was something she could do very well with the help of her pet fox Chrome. The city of Stalliongrad came into view and she knew her journey to meet this employer would be coming to an end, and the real adventure was soon to follow. Trekker levitated the letter she had received from Snowfall from her saddle bag and read it for the location. After asking a pony where she could find the place of residence of Miss Snowfall, they laughed and pointed to a rather large mansion. "[colour=#336633]Well I should have expected that[/colour]" Trekker thought to herself. Trekker walked up to the large doors and before she could even knock, they opened wide and she was shown in. There was a few other ponies there already. A REA pony wearing some armour and a wandering detective made their introductions. Trekker wasn't sure what to make of either. The pegasus pony in the armour Fire Walker, seemed a capable adventurer and prepared for anything and very confident. Hopefully she and Trekker wouldn't but heads on what to do, after all formal training and experience based training are rather different. Trekker was competent but had little classical survival training, everything she learned was from Canterlot in the ways of magic. The detective seemed less so. Wondering what good a single detective can do. "[colour=#336633]Um... Hello, you must be Miss Snowfall. My name is Trekker, I'm the adventurer who answered your ad. Thanks for inviting me on this adventure.[/colour]" As Trekker said that Chrome yelped and jumped as if to announce himself. "[colour=#336633]Oh right, and this is my pet silver fox Chrome, I'm sure he'll be of some great assistance if you are searching for somepony, providing you have a scent sample. But I must ask, your letter and ad were both vague, who and what are we looking for. Unfortunately for me, I've been out of the social loop while I've been on my travels. I heard there was some trinket stolen from some other ponies on the way here, some sort of ruby claw they called it. If it is the Aquellian "ruby claw," I'd be curious how you came across such a trinket. It isn't something that is easily found or acquired with money alone. In any case, my knowledge and abilities are at your disposal... As well as Chrome's.[/colour]" Curious at what she was getting herself into, she asked a few questions of her host. Not that it mattered. She had already agreed to join the expedition, so she would do her best to keep everyone safe and on the right track, as she was employed to.

Sorry it took so long to get back to you. Before this can be stamped and filed, you need to mark this as "[Ready]" in the title of the app Please do this by using the full editor of the original post. The title of the app should read "disharmony [ready]" (as in when you are browsing the Application forum, that is what you should click on to get into this app) Do that and I can send this to the SRPHS for stamping. Thanks!

If you change the RP type to "Free for All" a SRPHS can stamp this. Or you can start playing without the stamp. It is entirely up to you!

Hey there! Thanks so much for your interest in our game! Unfortunately Draconequus as a species is on our list of unplayable species for our World of Equestria area. Fret not though! You can play your character in the Free for All area. And we are always expanding on areas of play. So you might be able to play your character in a WoE-like area soon! So keep your eyes peeled for announcements about that!

USMC. Aiming to be Military Police.

Might you be able to draw my OC Trekker?

Can we avoid geopolitical debates please? On topic... I have a "hoorah" for my friend who just went to boot camp.

Sorry it is taking me so long to get back to this. I'm in the process of moving. I promise you I'll get to it by the end of the week if not sooner! Thank you for your patience!

They are your pets so yeah. That's what I've been doing.

You mean insane right?

Steel likes pseudointellecutal lines? Got it. I haven't heard this one since Philosophy...

Pretty much what Halide and Volt said. There are several universal principles that cannot be ignored. There are many theories to multiverse, multiple timelines, bubble universes, string theory and so forth. In the end they all follow the basic tenants of physics. MLP:FiM does not. But you know what? Let's humor this idea and get theoretical... So, for argument's sake, let us say that it was possible for there to be different physical principles in an alternate universe. OK! So we now have a universe in which the laws of physics function differently from our own. Now... what about life? Can the same multicellular life still occur? Would it still occur in the same way? While possible, the probability is infinitesimal. We evolved through a very specific set of circumstances, and any life not yet discovered in our universe did the same. All governed by the same physical and chemical principles. Changing any variable of that would change the process of evolution, and thus life itself. Heck, we wouldn't even know if DNA would form in a universe in which the various scientific principles weren't the same. Life on earth occurred because of a set of very specific occurrences happened. And I'm sure the same can be said of anywhere else in the universe, even if it is new life that is not based in the same basic principles as the carbon based life on Earth is. So even IF by some crazy idea that some other universe exists with a planet like Earth, and physics to match MLP:FiM, the question would become, would life present itself in the same way, if at all? The answer is highly unlikely, near impossible. So while the idea is lovely, I choose to not delude myself.

Turnabout Storm is a brilliant crossover, and a fantastic way to get into FiM! Hope you enjoy yourself here!

Sweet! I'm going to go ahead and pass this up the latter now! Please be patient while a SRPHS reviews your app

This is much improved! Fantastic work! The personality is a bit short, but honestly, I see that as more of a result of having the areas that would normally be in the personality scattered elsewhere (ie likes/dislikes/flaws/motivation). Because of that I have a solid idea for your character and how they will interact. There is just ONE small tiny thing preventing me from sending this up for final review by SRPHS... [/colour][colour=#282828]That has to go. Though it is in brackets, the reasoning is very much the same as the Mythponies thing. It connects this app to the real world. We try to maintain the illusion of Equestria even in the apps. If the sound of the voice is that vital to the story, please feel free to describe it in your own words. However, I think it can just be removed without greatly impacting your app.[/colour] [colour=#282828]This is a fantastic app though! I can't wait to see the character in the game! [/colour]

Not that I know of. I'm indifferent to the fandom though . Canterlot is the only part of the fandom I like for the most part.

Alright, so I want to make this clear. This app needs work for WoE. From the content to general length right down to simple proofreading. If you are sure you want it for WoE, I'll do a full review of it, when you mark this application [Ready] in the title of the app. (Please refer to my previous post on how to do this) If you want to use the character as is, you can switch this application to FFA and play her without any significant changes. If you choose WoE I'll do everything I can to get this application ready for Senior Roleplay Helper evaluation.

Hey there! Sorry for taking so long to get to this app! So without further adieu I shall review your app! Alright! so you have a fairly well written app here! And for some reason I enjoy pyro ponies. Perhaps it is the explosion loving scientist in me. First thing's first though. Myself and the other RPH team much prefer if users use Rarity's Simply Fabulous Application Form. While it is not a hard and fast requirement, we feel that it works best in creating a well balanced application form! Next, mentions of the MythPonies have to go unfortunately. As much as I love the Mythbusters, they are too close to the real world. If you want to replace them with an original idea not connected to real life people/shows, that's fine, but they are a crossover element, which we do not allow in apps for World of Equestria. Other than that... You app just seems a bit short. Your pony is a mare! Surely she did some more stuff than just get into trouble. How did she hone her skills? What did she do for fun as a filly? Did she play with friends? What were her friends reactions to the explosions and such? Go into detail in the history! In personality, the same can be said, but there is an additional caveat! Aside from being a bit on the short side, there are simply no xBoxes in Equestria. They don't even have television! So that will need to be removed, in addition into going into more detail in her personality. How does she interact with everypony? She seems to disregard safety when it comes to pyrotechnics at times, but does she still care that no one is hurt? Does she ensure everypony is at a safe distance? What else does she do for fun? Does she go out with pony friends? Really other than removing some IRL references, all you need to do is expand upon this app and give us more detail on your character! Good luck!

Hey there! Any progress on this app?

For the next two weeks my activity will be sporadic to nonexistent. The nonexistent times will be next weekend. All of this is due to moving. I'll try to be on as much as I can. Update: might be a bit longer than originally thought

Hey there! I love the idea for the character. And on the whole this is a good app. There are a few things that will need tweaking or modifying. The biggest thing is the name of the parents. Direct references to real world peoples is not allowed in apps. The other issue is that, well, it doesn't sound too pony-like. You can feel free to rename them to something more appropriate, or remove the names completely. Parental names are encouraged, but never required in apps. The use of the term toddler is also out of place, since that is specifically a human term (referring to a child whom is just learning how to walk). The pony appropriate term would be "foal." The next thing that raises an eyebrow is that they got media attention for having Tinder. While I can imagine them getting media attention for announcing a new death-defying act (as part of publicity), child birth not so much. It just seems superfluous. Honestly, the rest of my comments have to do with proofreading. Making sure everything written makes sense, and proper capitalization is used. There are a few sentences that don't make much sense. The mains one that comes to mind are There are other things that don't make much sense either, so it would be good to give your app another once over. However, that said, this is an excellent app and a really unique and interesting character. It just needs a bit more work. If you have any questions, please feel free to ask!

Sounds good Loopend! Thanks for your time

Might I request my OC pony Trekker?