AlisonRose

Well the only concern that the SRPH staff has is that the pony seems to be selfish and: "[colour=#282828] I know it's a common trope for adopted individuals to want to seek out their birth parents, but still... this strikes me as kind of too much. From what the app describes, these adopted parents elected to take the pony in, personally raised her, educated her, taught her survival skills and helped shape her world view. She finds out they're not her real parents and she turns on them completely, runs away and lets the whole issue become this ugly chip on her shoulder." - SRPH[/colour]

Before this App can get stamped you need to per say do a little working out of the app. Firstly you missed the occupation area, secondly you might want to rethink your characters story as I am not sure that it is up to Mane RP levels. An SRPH member looked at the app and said while the story doesn't stop the app from getting stamped he would sure like to see a slightly different take on it. If you need any help simply post here and I will get the response and do the best I can to assist you.

You'll have to wait until a SRPH looks at the app, I am sorry.

Looks good to me =D Now a SRP has to look at it, but don't worry with all the pushing that I did I am sure this app will get through!

How about expanding more on your characters writing ability? Such as maybe any books he had written or some stories that he wrote. Also a more descriptive Cutie Mark Story would be amazing if you could muster it up. Other then a few nit picky things the app over-all is looking good!

It didn't take much to get Apple Pie's tail a swaying but today it sure seemed like it was going at mach five whenever she got close to Pinchy. The two had been pen pals and had even seen each other a few times before this but this was the first time that they were going to spend an extended period of time together. [colour=#00ff00]"Oh please Pinchy, we must control ourselves."[/colour] She started and then let out a small giggle that was covered by her hoof. [colour=#00ff00]"Until your mother goes to sleep that is."[/colour] She then let out another giggle thinking that she was funniest little filly ever. She took a deep breath and resumed her expression of full-emotionless-Apple-Pie. She produced from her bag a small box within it was two Monach Butterflies and a lone Winter's Grace Butterfly. It was a rare butterfly to be sure but Apple Pie had had it since she got the small larva from her cousin Apple Bumpkin's flower garden. [colour=#00ff00]"I also remember you had said something about alien butterfly invaders from the planet Flora so I brought over some that we can 'interrogate' them and perhaps convince them to take us to their leader and what not."[/colour] She still had that emotionless face and placed the box of butterflies before Pinchy and with a difinitive strike of her hoof next to it she spoke.[colour=#00ff00] "But be careful with the white one, that is a special kind of Butterfly to me and I don't want to lose it."[/colour] She let a strange smile streak her face as she looked on now past Pinchy into the actual house as she picked up the bags of Apple Pies with ease and brought them into the house leaving them within an easily reachable area for Ruby. She would find them heavy but then again when you make and move as many Apple Pies as Apple Pie does then you should know that Apple Pies can be heavy, unlike Apple Pie. She let the name puns run though her head for a while and then settled on one about eating Apple Pie and shook her head and gave a disgusted look before returning to her normal composure. [colour=#00ff00]"So, what should we get in trouble for first you ask? I do think a blanket fort would do wonders."[/colour] She grinned, now a natural one, she even scooted herself next to Pinchy and looked up to Ruby with the same adorable eyes that Pinchy most likely used when she wanted to get things her way.

Apple Bumpkin had chosen the most perfect time to look over her shoulder as she saw all the foals trotting into the building where the massive buckets of Apples and some hosing as well as some strange looking contraptions were housed. She had the best view of Cheerilee as she trotted in with her soaking wet mane. Bumpkin's ears pinned up at the sight and she gave a gasping expression as she would normally not have taken note but for some strange reason it just stuck out to her with the way she looked as of current. After shaking the thoughts from her head she looked back over and nodded to her cousin Apple Bloom. [colour=#a52a2a]"Well 'Ah think so at least, ya just gallop on that thing there,"[/colour] she pointed with her hoof to a tredmill that was hooked up to a rather large red machine that had roughly enough room for two grown ponies to prance around in side it. [colour=#a52a2a]"And atop ya have two ponies that are stomping on tha apples real good like, and down here," [/colour]Her hoof finds its way to a small hopper that leads into the larger machine. [colour=#a52a2a]"Ya throw in the good apples here, so while a few of ya foals are going through the apples and then some of ya are cleanin 'em and throwin them into the hopper here, a lucky pony and myself will be up there and then a bunch of the rest of ya will be here making the whole thing go!" [/colour]She took a long pause as she noticed that she had started to ramble on. [colour=#a52a2a]"After all of that we can even have some of the Apple Juice that we all make!"[/colour] She grinned from ear to ear since she knew that this was something so easy and fool, pardon the pun....FOAL, proof. [colour=#a52a2a]"Also, Cheerilee I'd like to pull you aside when you have some time, 'Ah just have a few details to work out with ya is all." [/colour]She tries to hold her huge grin but ends up faulting back to her shy expression when she looks at Cheerilee. So instead of facing the issue face to face she turns around and begins to climb up into the top of the large machine and simply wait, hoping that each of the foals will file out and take a place they feel most comfortable with.

I love LoL and I normally play some form of Carry whether it be AP or AD. I've been addicted to Kat lately as well as a bunch of my other girls that I play =D I'm only lvl 17 and not nearly good enough for Ranked or even Normal for that matter, but I recently got a new com so I will for sure have to work it out with some LoL

I'm sorry I've been very busy lately, but from what I see you have done some work on the app and while I would like to tell you that all the grass is greener on the other side this app still needs a lot of attention. Keep at it and try and give us more information about your pony's history and more of a back story about how they got their cutie mark and why it is so significant to them.

Huffing and puffing as she stumbled into the bar. Misty had been helping with the storm but after it started to get dark she found it hard to see even with her corrective lenses over her eyes. She lets out a soft sigh and finds a seat up next to the bar and began to order. [colour=#00ffff]"I would like a large glass of lemon water....and some cake, do you have cake?"[/colour] She asked not even knowing what sort of establishment this was since her goggles were dangling around her neck instead of being over her eyes. She let herself fall limp and rested her head on the counter and unzipped the front of her Uniform. Her mane fell to one side and covered her face showing how much enthusiasm she really did have. This weather system had kicked her butt in more then one way and now all she had wanted to do was relax in the bar with a bunch of her Pegasus friends and for all she knew finally get around to talking with that elusive Soarin who was part of the mane Wonderbolts team where as she was from the 'in-training' group who only ever really preformed on rare occasions.

Fun fact: Steel was actually not allowed to vote, nor was anyone who was bias towards voting for his app. The votes were done in a fair and controlled environment so there was no possible way for fraud.

The blush was strong with this one. She looked on as Zecora kissed Cheerilee on the cheek and this caused Apple Bumpkin to assume the fainting goat position. She lay on the ground all four hooves in the air and her eyes wide, somepony who wasn't her just kissed Cheerilee. [colour=#a52a2a]"Well...."[/colour] She started, [colour=#a52a2a]"At least it can't get..."[/colour] Suddenly a loud crack of thunder sounded and it began to rain in a very melodramatic way to the point of seeming to be planned. [colour=#a52a2a]"Worse."[/colour] She let out a sigh and looked over at all of the ponies before she stood back up and flipped her mane out of her face, normally its curly ends would keep itself out of her face but when it got wet her mane very seldom behaved. [colour=#a52a2a]"Hurry ponies to the Apple Cider making shed! Don't need ya'll catchin a cold!"[/colour] She tried to yell out over the pounding noise of the rain, sure it just seemed to be raining hard but Bumpkin didn't want to take the chance of getting any of the foals sick and never hearing back from Cheerilee or the fact that then they would have to stop the field trip and take care of the sick pony. Bumpkin pointed with her hoof towards the shed that seemed to be oddly placed in between the trees of the Tiny Apple Valley but to Bumpkin and her sister it made perfect sense why it was there. Less travel time, more profit. Bumpkin trotted over to Cheerilee and bowed her head before the teacher mare. [colour=#a52a2a]" 'Ah'm sorry that this trip has been such a disaster, 'Ah didn't know that fate would be conspiring against us like this."[/colour] She sighed again and started to trot off towards the shed hoping that the foals and the other two mares were in tow. The day would get better for sure, Apple Bumpkin wasn't going to let these youngins have a bad day, nor was she going to let Cheerilee and Zecora have to bear all of the responsibility for these foals when they all got back to Ponyvile, Apple Bumpkin was going to make this THE BEST DAY EVER!

With a polite nod and an attempted smile Apple Pie looked up to Berry and nodded her head. [colour=#00ff00]"Hello Mrs Punch, this bag is for you. Within it are the contents to keep Pinchy occupied for hours on end and the secret to all life in Equestira as we know it."[/colour] Knowing that things like this didn't really exist she stiffled a small giggle by putting her hoof up to her mouth and simply letting out a [colour=#00ff00]"Teehee"[/colour] before returning to her all to serious face. [colour=#00ff00]"Sorry, I let my small humor get the best of me there. Inside of the bag is thirteen Apple Pies made by yours truely, I simply hope that they are not too damaged from the travel." [/colour]She nodded her head again and placed the bag of Apple Pies in front of Berry Punch hoping that they would be a gift of appeasement for letting her come spend the weekend with the filly who seemed to be the only friend her age that she had. [colour=#00ff00]"What sort of rules should I be expecting for my visit here?"[/colour] She took out a list from one of her saddlebags and looked it over. [colour=#00ff00]"I already have: No sampling the adult beverages, no rough housing, no breaking things, no going to bed without brushing your teeth and taking a bath, no getting too dirty, no jumping on beds, no..."[/colour] She trailed on and on listing a bunch of rules that would most likely end up either being broken or simply ignored all together. But Apple Pie knew her place and was happy to at least have the time to play with Pinchy. After finishing her list she looks at Pinchy who seems to not be able to be ANY happier then she currently was and stepped forward into the house. [colour=#00ff00]"Well, what kind of trouble shall we get into first?"[/colour] She looks as innocent and emotionless as she can, her whole body stopping or so it seems that she has become a statue and simply looks on at Pinchy not even blinking.

She nodded her head a few times as she talked with Apple Cinnamon but the conversation took a sharp turn when she asked if there was something on Bumpkin's mind. There was, in fact there was a few things on her mind but none of them were really that interesting to other ponies. She swallowed some of the Lemon Water that she brought and then looked over to Apple Cinnamon. [colour=#a52a2a]"Well mah dear cousin, there are a few tings on my mind but its not that I often like to talk about them. They are mostly about personal stuff like my crush or my garden. If'n ya want me ta talk bout 'em Ah'd be happy to but Ah normally don't unless the other ponies be wantin me to."[/colour] She nodded her head again as she heard Braeburn tell her that her cousin Big Mac also had crush on a school teacher pony also. Bumpkin had heard about Apple Bloom's antics with the love potion so she knew all too well what Breaburn meant by that, but it still sent shivers up her spine and caused a TON of blush to steak across her face. The topic of her special somepony was rather touchy still but she could always keep dreaming about it. [colour=#a52a2a]" 'Ah think that'd be a good plan, but you'd have ta get Big Mac to actually wanna talk ta me bout it."[/colour] She takes another drink of her Lemon Water trying to dodge the topic but still get the point out that its the same teacher pony that the two of them were into. But she knew that Big Mac more so thought of the teacher pony as just a friend rather then a potential Special Somepony. Apple Pie lay frozen on the floor as she watched with wide eyes as a piece of wood came crashing down close to her head, if she hadn't scrunched up at the last second in fear she would have been knocked out by it. At that Apple Pie jumped up back on her hooves and looked at Apple Bloom with a face that screamed bewilderment. It was one of the few times that she was showing her emotions, this time she felt that Apple Bloom had to know exactly what was going on. [colour=#00ff00]" 'Ah'm sorry cousin, I'm not possessed or whatever you thought. It has just been rather bemusing lately thanks to the fortunes that Madame Pinkie had read for me, I am to find love yes, but she doesn't know wether it will be a Filly or a Colt. Nor did she know when I would find this love. It is hard to keep in high spirits when you get such muddled information about your future."[/colour] She took a deep breath and nodded her head a few times just for effect, her face now attempting to smile at Apple Bloom. [colour=#00ff00]"I mean, I found your book."[/colour] She reached down and picked the book up out of the pile and placed it in front of her cousin.[colour=#00ff00] "I hope you are not mad at me or still wanting to hit me with that piece of wood. I am very sorry about all of this confusion." [/colour]She sighed again still trying to smile at her cousin.

" or athletic (he is terrible at both) " The part there that is in the (brackets) is a side note, I was hoping that you could work and move them into the actual description.

In this app I notice that you have a few pony names in the Character Summary area. It would be really cool if you could remove the names and just state "His DJ friend" or something of the sort. In other news you use a lot of side descriptions (Like this) and I was wondering if you could incorporate them somehow into the app itself and not just have them being side notes? Also any more info on the pony would be amazing.

Hey there Midnight, just wanted to let you know that you have the same app also posted here: http://www.canterlot.com/topic/11864-midnight-blackhorn/ Which instance of the app are you going to keep? And from now on please just edit the original post instead of making a new topic.

Video of you dancing...right meow....

Welcome to Canterlot! I hope you have fun here and it seems that you have already made a few good friends (perhaps from other sites) I hope to see you around eventually ^^

Before much thought went into her actions Apple Pie was already at the front door to the house with her normal emotionless face. She looked around and observed her surroundings, it was amazing the she made it all the way here by herself. She was sure that Braeburn was worrying a lot about her and was most likely pulling his mane out at the thought that she wasn't within range for him to take care of her. She let out a soft giggle as she pictured Braeburn running around and yanking on his mane screaming her name. It was a sight to be hold for sure, but she had time to giggle about that later for now was the time that she would get to spend with one of her most enjoyable friends: Pinchy. She was going to be spending THE WHOLE WEEKEND with not only Pinchy but her mother Berry as well, they were going to be doing this thing called "having fun." Apple Pie knew nothing about this having fun, so it was a rare experience for her to get to be with some ponies who did. She brushed her bangs out of her face and prayed that her bonnet had kept the rest of her mane in place while she traveled, it was one thing to arrive looking a bit disheveled and then there was looking presentable. Apple Pie tried her best to always look as good if not better then how she felt, and today she felt pretty darn good so she had to make sure that every hair was in its proper place at all times. She grinned and checked her teeth to see if she still had some greens in them, finding she didn't she quickly ran her tongue over her teeth and her lips before returning to her normal face. She then cleared her throat and knocked a few times on the door. *tap, tap-tap, tap, tap-tap-tap* her knocks came on the door in a rather rhythmical sense but to Apple Pie that was the only way to do it, she had to make a good entrance some how. But now came the hardest part of her visit, the introductions and getting everything in order.