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Looking around innocently TurnTimber simply grinned at Yuki. "You see, instead of having it just be one giant pile that would damage the items. I places each into a respective sub-pile so that like items were together." She gave a large grin for a moment and then adjusted her glasses as she turned and swished her tail. She walked past Yuki and straight up to High Roller, she was confused as to what all the commotion was going on about some silly doll, but once she had seen the doll she was in love with it. She looked about and noticed her relitive closeness to Princess Cadence and swallowed hard as she backed up a bit, with a soft giggle she plotted and planned on how she was going to get a copy of that doll or that one in particular. Cadence was very pretty and it was good to often have 'eye-candy' around in times of need. "That doll, how many have you made like that?" She looked on at the thing with eyes wide.

In case you were confused, Mane is one of the two Admins of Canterot ^^ And just let me know once you have all the changes in effect and I will give your app another run over.

"In moderation, this would probably be fine- but we just want to stay away from the appearance of vampire ponies- so if its obvious they are just gag teeth, and are used for such, then that should be okay" The all powerful Mane has spoken.

Sorry to disappoint but as per the statement of a Senior-RP Helper: "Absolutely not, no weird special physical features." (That is in reference to her teeth and eyes.) So if you still want the character you will have to change the whole thing about her features, but if you don't want the character if she can't be like that then I can have this App locked and moved for you. The choice is all yours.

So you have her marked as Final but the last line of your app says: Still a work in progress. So is she WiP or Final?

As per we only need one RP Helper per app I will be backing out and leaving you in the hands of Rosewind who is very skilled at fixing things like this. Good luck on the App!

At the word 'Pile' TurnTimber cringed and threw out a face of pure disgust at the fact that all of these nautical treasures were to be simply tossed into a pile. She watched closely as Yuki took each piece and moved it over some of them giving him trouble and each piece that was put into said pile making her more scared for the next and the previous pieces that he had put onto the pile. To make things even worse he was TOUCHING all of these nautical treasures whilst moving them, but it was too late as the task was soon complete and before she could scold him none the less. She trotted with a furious pace over to the pile and began to examine each piece to make sure that none of them were damaged in anyway at all. She looked over back towards the group as she had soon figured out how much of a jerk she must look like as she doesn't even trust a simple stallion who was only trying to help out and collect her things into a neat location for her. She frowned a bit as she ruffled her own mane a bit then let it fall back into its semi-organized place before she attempted to shoot Yuki a very cute and apologetic face. "All of these treasures, mine, all of them..." She softly whispered to herself as she looked at the pile and all of its glory. She would not be sleeping tonight, she had too much work to do with all of these treasures. "Pardon me, there seems to be one thing missing." She trotted over to Yuki and placed a hoof on his chin and turned his head towards her and gave him what seemed to be a kissy face before she put the other hoof behind his head and then produced from what seemed to be thin air five bits which she held out for the stallion to take. "For services rendered." Little did he know that they were his own bits that she had simply taken and now were returning to him, but that was for a later explanation.

Not knowing what was really going on Apple Pie simply stood on her hind hooves and let out an unenthusiastic: "Woo..." She then took a deep breath and trotted her way over to Apple Bumpkin where she politely bowed and talked in her shy and slow manner. "I am sorry that Braeburn failed to impose onto you the more proper acknowledgement of victory. I am sorry for your untimely loss, it was a good game regardless and I am sure that the statistics were against us in the end and even in the begining since Braeburn counts as a handicap of three points since his skill at Horseshoes is bar-none." She nodded her head a few times feeling that she had to the fullest extent explained herself where as Braeburn was too busy celebrating to congratulate Bumpkin on a good game. She then turned to Braeburn who seemed to be already preparing for another game of Horseshoes, on this note Apple Pie took the chance to move close to Braeburn and whisper in his ear. "I....I'm going to go talk to Apple Bloom or so I hope." With that she sat down right next to Braeburn giving the most cute expression that she could. With a strange look Apple Bumpkin took in everything that Apple Pie said and simply nodded her head as she had no idea what the pony really had just said, but darn did it sound smart. "Well thank ya fer the game then Braeburn!" Apple Bumpkin flipped her mane out of her face and grinned largely as she looked about trying to think of what she could do to hide her failure at horseshoes. " 'Ah wonder if'n any of tha food is ready fer eatin." Bumpkin giggled to herself as she started to slowly trot her way over to the pick nick tables. "Losing is aight but 'Ah just think that mah game was off an all." She giggled again as she sat on the bench and just let her head rest on the table and then let out a soft sigh as she just looked at the food. Wow, 'Ah really am lettin this get ta me aint 'Ah. 'Ah just gotta find tha bright side! She thought to herself as she just rested her head then started to grin.

Hello Jaded! Wow....just wow... very very nice app! Passing it on to get stamped!

Well based on what Cherry said: Take her word for it, she knows more then she is letting on XD She brings up great points and great ideas to help you out. Just be sure to not Copy/paste what she says into your app and make it into your own words.

Hello there Punky! I see that you have a nice start to an app here but there are a few things that seem to have gone wrong in this app. First: There are no CDs in equestira, there are however records (as per DJ-Pon3 and other references) Second: The information about the character is...lacking, if you could go and look at your character in your own mind or something and write down their experiences that they have had in equestria as a foal or adult that would help improve the way the character feels. Also, as a side note to this: being a musician is fine for an occupation but most ponies will think on the side of Octavia or Fiddlesticks who are what is refereed to as a classical musician, so I would offer that you change the occupation to Guitarist or something of that sort. Third: I understand that this app is an on-going process until it fits the criteria of the RP Helpstaff working with you on it (That would be myself) so please send me a PM should you have questions about what can be changed on the app and such.

Shaking her head no a few times TurnTimber looked at Madam Bistro and shot her a quizzical face. "What ever in the world would I need help taking these fine treasures back to my ship...I mean, my current place of residence." She let out a soft sigh as she was trying to figure out if there was anyway for her to stay and perhaps have a conversation with not only the fine stallion of Pigpen, but also the grand princess Cadence. "My fine stallion," She started as she looked on to Pigpen, "Would it be ok so that I could leave the fine treasures in a seperate pile so that I can stay for a while and continue to converse with you and the other fine guests of your shop? I promise I wont get in the way." She shot Pigpen the cutest grin that she could muster before flipping her mane out of her face for maximum effect, if that didn't work she would have to use her 'Super Secret Cute Stare' to convince the stallion that it was 'safe' to let the mare stay around and worm her way not only into his life but the princesses as well.

Well hello there Observed! WOW This is a great app! I hope you have as much fun playing as this fine pony in RP as it was to read about her. She is in fact ready to be passed on to a higher-up for a STAMP OF AMAZINGNESS!

Well hello there Greed! This character sounds amazing!!!! I think he would get along amazingly well with Octavia and her sister Fiddlesticks! Also, there is but one thing that I would really like to see about this character. Is there anyway that you could perhaps give us a more detailed and expansive history of him or a more....elaboritive (yup, just made that word up...) summary of him? I really like how he is now, but I think he just needs a bit more of something to push him into that fully final stage. Perhaps talk about his life as a foal in more detail? Or even his life in Trottingham, even his experiences in Ponyville would count towards helping this app out. I'm not trying to be mean with this but it just feels lacking still in the informational way, but it is still a very good app. Hope this helps! Lovingly, Alison

Hey there TheInvisiblePony! Wow! This is a very very solid app! Good work on this one! The only thing that I would ask of you (That you can choose to not do) is to refrain from using names for NPC ponies that do not exist in the forum canon yet, so as to keep the names open. Honestly I can not tell you TO change them since it is only a guideline and a good gesture to keep the names open, but it is ultimately your call and from everything I see I am going to pass your app on to get a Senior RP Helpstaff to look at it! Can't wait to see you in the actual RP area with this work of art!

Hello there Carmana, I would like to start out by saying that what of an app you have given us it looks rather well! As a writer though I would like to see if you could take all of your out of thought notes the (insert example here) and incorperate it into the actual story itself about your stallion. Also I was wondering if you would be willing to change how your unicorns magic works for him, and by that I mean change the fact that he makes "structures and devices" to perhaps be something more like: His unicorn magic burst forth from his horn and pulled and pushed the world into the shapes of walls, trenches, and even towers, in effect creating a small fortress in his dark corner of the Everfree Forest. Hope this helps! PS: I sure would LOVE to see more about this character if you could supply us as to more info about them!

Not wanting to let Braeburn down Apple Pie picked up the last horseshoe and with what felt like such beginners grace she spun around exactly three full turns and then launched the horseshoe from her mouth. It landed around the post with a very distinct sound, it was in fact a ringer (20+18=38, Ringer) with a huge grin on her face all she could muster seemed to be an emotionless: "Did I do good Braeburn?" She had already taken off her bonnet before picking up the horseshoe so her green mane was now let down but crimped all over the place from being held up in the bonnet for so long. It felt good to not only help out Braeburn but to also let her mane down for once. Surely this wouldn't be too much of a distraction or an issue to anypony around. She simply just stood there and looked at Braeburn not knowing what to do now as her mane blew in the wind just enough to spark a faint giggle from the small pony. Apple Bumpkin looked on in pure shock as she watched Braeburn score such good throws, soon followed by Apple Pie's AMAZING pitch, it was her turn again and it was time to lay it all on the line for her respect and for Tiny Apple Valley. (18+12=30, 1.5in) She grabbed the horseshoe with as much grace and diligence that she could and tossed it up into the air with eyes closed and as it fell she opened them just in time to dramatically buck the horseshoe it landed just a mear one and a half inches away from the post and just sat there. With a determined look on her face she was not about to lose to Braeburn, not for any reason. She took the last of her chances into her mouth and forgot all about the world for a moment and just focused on the single post in front of her and getting the horseshoe around it. (10+8=18, Miss) Bumpkin must have zoned out too much since when she came back to the horseshoe was no longer in her mouth, it was way up in a tree a few feet behind the post, even if it fell it wouldn't be even close to the sand pit that the post was resting in. Sadly Bumpkin had just lost, she had thrown all of her chances out of the window and was beaten by Braeburn, she was never going to hear the end of it...ever... "Wow, that was a good game Braeburn!" Was all she could say even though the feeling of dread knowing that she lost to Braeburn crept across her back and turned her smile to a frown and quickly changed her whole demeanor.

With a grin as wide as the sun is high in the sky at noon Apple Bumpkin turned about to look right at the silly foals discussing 'Juice Drinking' Cutie Marks. Surely a Juice Drinking Cutie Mark wouldn't help with much in life other then staying hydrated. But that wasn't really the matter when it came down to the fact that the foals would be having fun WHILE learning, it was a win-win. But the best part was that she got more time to think about how to impress Cheerilee and get her to stop being so uncomfortable around her. It was only a matter of time before they would be friends, or so Bumpkin was hoping. "Well 'Ah don't see why ya'll'd want a juice drinking Cutie Mark, but 'Ah can tell ya that we get the seeds out from usin a filter. It's a pretty fancy creation an't'all but mah sister here," Mid sentence she stops to point a hoof very excitably to her sister Caramel Apple who was busy discussing something with Cheerilee and Zecora, "she went an got tha moneh together an bought us a few of them ta use so we make really really good Apple Juice, but we dun make Cider like they do on Sweet Apple Acres." She said with a giggle, not seeming to take a breath the whole time and finishing it all off by resting her hoof back in perfect place on the ground and then taking a few shallow breaths trying to catch it as it flows past on the wind. She swished her tail a few times as the smile returned to her face not as big as before but still big enough for all around to know that no matter what chaos was happening or was going to happen she was ready and willing to deal with it. It was about time for them to get moving if they wanted to get to the Distillery anytime soon, not that the day was going past fast, in fact it seemed like the day was only just beginning.

Misty looked on and just blushed at Applejack as she had no idea how to respond, then Survey's statement about taking the photo came into her head. She swiftly turned her head over to him and grinned and nodded her head a few times. "Well I have no problems with that." She giggled as she tuned over and took the pen quickly from Applejack and with a stupidly happy smile signed the apple very slowly adorning it with: "To my very special friend, Applejack, Thank you for the kiss, ~Misty Morning~" She smiled and looked back to Applejack and placed the pen back down on the table and then nodded her head a few more times. "So Applejack, the ball is in your court. Should you want the picture to be taken we could do that, or we can just have a more proper kiss." It took her but a small giggle to get herself into the proper mental situation to be ready for the kiss now and was more ready then she was before (Not that she was even ready before.) She was decently wondering how out of porportion this kiss would get but it didn't matter that much to Misty, she just wanted to leave a good taste in Applejack's mouth, or so to speak. She leaned in close her eyes un-moving as she just stood there waiting for Survey and Applejack to be ready for the 'festivities.'

Misty looked on at Applejack who seemed to still be blushing a bit. Flapping her wings a bit she stepped forward and then rested them at her sides. She put her bit purse down and placed the five bits neatly and carefully down on the table and slid them towards Applejack with a shy grin on her face. She adjusted her goggles around her neck as she tried to dispel her own feelings of nervousness and fluster. "You, don't mind, kissing another mare?" Misty looked at the ground then back up to Applejack, now blushing she didn't know that she now had a stupidly happy grin on her face. It wasn't so much that she wanted to kiss another mare but it was a good thing that Applejack wasn't scared to and it made her feel somewhat at ease and ready to also kiss another mare, well more be kissed by the mare. "I wouldn't mind getting the kiss photographed or something for you to use as blackmail or even let me sign something for you. I already gave one autograph out." This promptly caused her to giggle with a strange amount of excitment as she looked about for something to focus on until Applejack was ready for the kiss.

Misty Morning took her steps forward and before she could even think about it she was now at the front of the line and standing in front of whom she was to guess was the famed Applejack, hero of Equestira (Twice over) and was here to sell apples and give kisses. Misty adjusted her goggles, and actually took them off and let them hang around her neck as she flipped her mane out of her face showing off her eyes as she looked on to Applejack. "Oh, um, hello, you...must be Applejack." Misty was already taken a back by the amazingly fit and oddly attractive mare. Normally Misty would feel bad for observing other mares in that way but for some reason in this situation it felt....right? She let out a small sigh and then stepped even closer and closing the gap between her and Applejack. "I, would like a bushel of apples and a kiss I guess." It took her a few moments to comprehend how she had said that and then shook her head no. "I mean...the kiss, its not what I am here for...but I do want one, not that you have to give one, its just that you could give one since its you offering but I don't need one so I don't have to pay for it. But I will pay if I have to, for the apples I mean." The thoughts in her head were confusing even to herself and she just stopped talking and looked on to Applejack. "I'm sorry, I've just never been so close to a true famous pony such as yourself." She let out a small giggle and used her hoof to brush the back of her mane a but and unfurled her wings and flapped them trying to find the breeze hoping it would help to calm herself. Not fining it she put her wings away and returned to grinning oddly at Applejack trying to think of ways to convince her that she wasn't just another pony and that it was fine to be friendly towards her, not that Applejack had been anything but friendly to anypony who she has ever seen. At least as well as Misty knew.

Apple Bumpkin took in all the questions that the foals had for her as she bobbed her head up and down in thought. First, she turned to a small purpleish foal and started to speak. "Teh answer ya'll are lookin fer is that each seed has its own genetic code and ta only way ta be sure ya have the same color of apples is we plant them over yonder in a fenced off area of ta farm and once they are grown enough we move them ta their proper area to be with their kin." She nodded her head and with a massive grin turned over to Apple Bloom and her grin changed to a face of pure puzzlement. "Well 'Ah could show ya'll how we make it, or ya'll could try yer hooves at helpin makin some!" She giggled to herself a bit at the fact that she was not only going to get the foals all in one place and help keep them controlled for Cheerilee but also get them to do some tiring work. The waves of yellow chicks had receded back towards the barn now that they had devoured all of the feed, Apple Bumpkin not even wanting to look at what was left of the feed bag just sighed as she looked on to the chicks staring at her from inside the shade of the barn, their small beedy eyes seeming to watch every single twitch of her body. One of these days the chicks would grow up and some would leave her care, but it still seemed like it was a very far time away before they were anymore then helpless little hungry chicks who devour every ounce of food in their path. She turned to Cheerilee as she started talking about the buddy system and a strange thought came through her head. "Well if'n the kids have ta do it, shouldn't we do it to? Only fair an t'all." She grinned a little and nodded her head to Cheerilee. Noticing that Rem was still passed out was starting to worry her a bit. " 'Ah've never seen a pegasus sleep this long. What in tarnation did he eat this mornin?" She put a hoof to her chin as she pondered the cause of his long sleep and then looked back over all the foals and smiled, it was a nice change of pace to not only have some foals on the farm that were willing to learn but she also had Cheerilee AND Zecora on the farm.

With a huge grin and a giggle she looked on as Braeburn preformed so well in front of all the on lookers. She stood up on her back hooves and stuck her front left hoof out and her front right hoof up as she managed to mutter out a emotionless. "Yay, go Braeburn." Before she stumbled and slipped on the grass and fell on her back but she was quick to right herself and resume her stance on all fours as she straightened up as Braeburn ruffled her mane. She was glad that he was feeling so good now and that made her happy and excited as she looked on to the game that she was starting to see was more then just tossing horseshoes. She narrowed her eyes trying to figure out how they were keeping score of the points or how the points were even awarded but it just seemed a bit too complicated, unlike bucking apple trees. With a gentle tug on Braeburn's hoof she pulled his head down and whispered in his ear. "Next round, may I try and throw one?" She was only wondering since now the game actually seemed sort of entertaining. After she let Braeburn return to his standing upright position Apple Pie looked around as more and more of the family made their way over to the Horseshoes area and began to play their own games of it. Apple Bumpkin gritted her teeth as she saw the two amazing pitches of the last round and his two almost as amazing pitches of the new round. She took a deep breath and pitched her first horseshoe. (19+13=32) It was a ringer, but just barely. She looked on and let out a sigh of relief as it landed around the post. She wasn't sure exactly how her aim was so off today but she knew that it wasn't something that bad to worry about right now since she had another pitch before the round was over. She quickly picked up her other horseshoe in her mouth and with Sleepy finally awakening to yawn she spins around and throws the horseshoe with almost a sniper's accuracy towards the post. (20+19=39) It was another ringer, but this time it was near perfect. She looked on with excitment this time as the horseshoe spun around the post a few times before losing its pull around the post and landing just against it as a leaner. She let out a sigh and returned her face to that of determination. She knew that she could preform better and she knew that it was just practice at the moment. She let out a giggle and turned to Braeburn and Apple Pie. "Wow, ya'll really are good Braeburn! But 'Ah have been off my game so ya'll better get ready for our final round, its going to be a no holds pitchoff for the title of best Horseshoe-er of the Apple Family!" She giggled as she hyped not only herself but Braeburn as well. The young mare was so full of excitement now that she was almost to the point of Pinkie Pie and bouncing all over the place instead of trotting there. She grabbed her next Horseshoe and pitched it, it landed a mile away from the post (1+1=2) With a frowning face she picked up her last Horseshoe for the round and spun around a few times before launching it from her mouth at the post. It landed with almost straight on accuracy...decently far away from it. (12+8=20) Apple Bumpkin let out a sigh and looked on wondering what in the world was throwing her game off so much now. Then it hit her, Sleepy was awake now and was unbalancing her. She let out a giggle as the thoughts ran through her head and she shook them as quickly as they came.