Hi there, Housin, you already know me as Sparkle. I'm gonna offer some suggestions as to what could help refine your app a little bit, now bear in mind, I'm not an RP helper or anything like that, so take my suggestions with a pinch of salt. But you asked me to go into detail, and so I shall. First issue is this, i'd suggest expanding this if you're going to roll with it, what sparked him to help her like that, what kind of operation costs 10 million bits. etc. Just a little Nitpick, I don't think these sound like very "pony" names. You're not limited to simply describing their jobs through their names, ponies aren't psychic, so they don't know what their kids are gonna be when they grow up Other than that, I think your Cutie Mark Section needs to be a little bit less fluffy and more comprehensive, explain how he actually got his cutie mark, In my opinion, I think it would be better if you developed it a little instead of having it just come from a spontaneous burst of magic, Cutie marks are supposed to be a marker of self discovery as well as your talent. As for your character summary, I would follow Lux's advice, characterize him a little better, point out what defines him and why. Hope I helped. You seem to be on the right track. And don't forget, Free For All is always an option.