Mojo

Hi Monochrome! Great app here! All of the required fields are filled and it is well written. Although this app is brief in some places, there's enough here to pass it. Good job! :D

Hi there! Excellent app! All of the required fields are filled and it is very well written and developed! A 'non-crystal' pony for the Crystal Empire works for me! Well done!

Mojo breathed a sigh of relief to see he had finally managed to convince Flax Seed of his noble intentions. His new friend seemed more relaxed too as the two engaged in poltie conversation. [colour=#8B4513]"Jolly good ya asked, friend," [/colour]the Paint stallion neighed in delight[colour=#8B4513] "I was born in this part of Equestria, grew up here too! Got me cutie mark one day in school when I was readin' one of me poems about peace! I met Jubilee Flyer while she was goin' ta a Performin' Arts school nearby. She was havin' a rough go at it, and I managed ta teach her how to relax, ta relieve stress. Ol' Wings is like a sister ta me, and I'm glad ta see she's got a nice handsome stallion in her life. I could tell ya how I met Nurse Starflower, but that's an even longer story, maybe I'll tell ya later. As for natural remedies, me mum and dad found some of those and then taught me how ta make'm. Y'know, simple things to help cure headaches, athlete's hoof, small stuff like that. I make no claim ta be a doctor, that wouldn't be cool. I've even got a exilar that'll give ya pep! Found some of an odd lookin' plant near the Everfree Forest. I ground it's beans, boiled it in water and now I gotta marvy tastin' drink that keeps ya alert and awake! Shall I make ya some ta try?"[/colour].

As Tilly Tome's wall shaking snoring continued, the sleeping Crystal Pony began to dream. She dreamed she was much younger, her mane interlaced with bright flowers as she galloped away from the library and slowly (so it seemed) into a nearby green meadow. A smile came upon the snoring filly's face as her dream continued. Galloping wild and free in the meadow until in the distance, she spotted a tall, majestic figure, Tilly's DREAM STALLION!!! As if she was floating on clouds, Tilly Tome galloped towards him, as if in slow motion. Her heart raced faster and faster as she approached him. As the anxious Crystal filly came to stop in front of him, the figure smiled before instantly transforming into... KING SOMBRA! The shock of this nightmare caused the sleeping, snoring Tilly's eyes to spring open, a look ot total fear in her eyes as she screamed out. The terrified filly's screams were far louder than her snoring had been! Shaking like a leaf, the terror-stricken Tilly moves to one corner of the mud pit she was in, too frightened to move a muscle, let alone climb back out.

As Granny Smith and Uncle Apple Strudel continued their work bringing up more bushels of apples and taking the bits as payment, the elderly Apple matriarch spotted a familiar pony in the distance. He was someone who had helped work at Sweet Apple Acres when their barn was partially damaged by fire. He was a Paint stallion with brown mane and a peace sign cutie mark... [colour=#8B4513]"Nothin' like a good ol' walk in the woods ta limber up the ol' legs," [/colour]the hippie brony said as he chanced to trot by the entrance to Sweet Apple Acres when he stopped long enough to read the sign. [colour=#8B4513]"Groovy! I would rather fancy some apples. And ta get a kiss from that gorgeous babe Applejack! She's quite a looker, though I doubt she'd consider goin' on a date with me. Sent out some real negative vibes last time I saw her. Oh well, I got me bits and some time, I'll step inta line and get me some apples, and get a kiss while doin' it!"[/colour] As the Paint stallion walked over to enter the back of the line, Granny Smith got very excited. [colour=#00FF00]"Thar he is! Thar he is! I knew that fancy talkin' feller;d show up here!"[/colour] [colour=#006400]"Vhat fancy fellow are you talking about, mein sister?" [/colour] [colour=#00FF00]"Why, Mojo of course! Always did like duh way that feller could sing and play guitar! And I'd betcha he'd make a dandy stallion fer our Applejack ta go courtin' with!"[/colour] [colour=#006400]"Now Granny! It vould not be fair to push AppleJack into someting she doesn't vant..."[/colour] [colour=#00FF00]"You let ME worry bout her, Strudel! I ain't gittin any younger and I sure wanna see mah Applejack git hitched before I go ta the great beyond."[/colour] [colour=#00FF00][colour=#006400]"I do not like dis und I vill not help you!"[/colour][/colour] [colour=#00FF00][colour=#00FF00]"I'm yur older sister and I outrank ya! We gotta find a way to git them two tagethur...."[/colour] [/colour]

[colour=#0000FF]"No Miss Stillheart, you are quite correct," [/colour]Saddlesore said as the blue Earth Pony walked with his taller unicorn mare companion. [colour=#0000FF]"The Pegasi do control most aspects of our weather in Equestria, but even they cannot control the beauty and majestic splender of the moon. You may deem yourself underqualified to comment on the night sky, but I do value your opinion. After all, you certainly travel a lot in your line of work, and your more global perspective would be far superior to my own. I don't travel much, and the few places that I've traveled to I didn't have a very good time when I got there. But with you here, with me, I am truly content. Thank you for sharing this evening with me, Miss Stillheart."[/colour]

It seemed to Mojo that he wasn't making much progress in making his new friend feel at ease. Seems the harder he tried, the more tense Flax Seed was becoming. Then, Flax's tone changed and asked the Paint stallion to convince him of his sincerety. [colour=#8B4513]"I dig ya, chum, and yur right, I don't know what it's like ta almost lose your pad to the Square Brothers. Sounds like a real bad scene. I don't know what more I can say, but you and your gal pal are welcome ta come visit me family's farm. Talk to me mum and dad, if I were some uncool villian type, would I invite you and your life partner over to me pad? Come see me peddler wagon too! Judge for yurself if I'm hip or a square, whatdoya say?"[/colour]

How is work on this app coming along? By the way, since "Mister Re" has been approved, you are free to switch this app back to "Ready" status, if you wish.

Yet another excellent OC, Dio! Well written bio, brilliant details! Excellent work!

[colour=#0000FF]"One step ahead of ya, Miss Carrot Top!" [/colour]Hayseed neighed as he pulled over his loaded shopping basket that he'd been carrying near him the entire time. [colour=#0000FF]"I've been pickin' up things here and thar the whole time I've been with ya. Didn't wanna miss a moment of bein' with ya, ma'am."[/colour] After saying that, the sturdy farm pony turned his head, blushing hard in his face. [colour=#0000FF]"Er, I'm ready ta check out whenever you are, Miss Carrot Top."[/colour] Meanwhile, other ponies were frantically completely their shopping in order to get the jar of Zap Apple Jam as a reward. Flam quickly levitated a number of items into his floating shopping basket and got into a checkout line. [colour=#FF8C00]"I've seized this opportunity, to get Zap Apple Jam for free! I'm Flam, yes Flam, one of the Fabulous Flim Flam brothers! Shopping wisely is my game!" [/colour]the lanky mustached unicorn stallion sang as he placed his basket on the checkup counter. [colour=#ff8c00]"Ready to make my buy, and ready for my Zap Apple Jam am I!!!"[/colour] Just behind Flam in line was Mr. Waddle, who chose a big basket with small wheels on the bottom so the elderly stallion could wheel his items up to the counter. [colour=#696969]"Oh my! I certainly hope I'm in time for the free Zap Apple Jam!" [/colour]Mr Waddle neighed. As Haymaker rushed frantically through the aisles grabbing items to put in her basket, Dr Stable quietly levitated the things he needed into his basket and got in line behind Mr. Waddle. [colour=#FF0000]"I was so busy with those medical emergencies that I nearly failed to complete my own shopping," [/colour]the unicorn stallion physician said. [colour=#B22222]"Slow down, sis!" [/colour]Haywire shouted as she galloped after her trotting big sister. [colour=#B22222]"Yur gonna run inta somethin'!"[/colour] [colour=#800080]"I know what I'm doin', squirt!" [/colour]Haymaker shouted seconds before colliding with a tall stack of cans. The avalanche of cans fell upon the form of the tripped up lanky red maned mare. [colour=#B22222]"You already, big sis?"[/colour] [colour=#800080]"Dang nabbit! I ain't got time fer fallin'! Time's runnin' out ta git the free jam! Gotta hurry!"[/colour] [colour=#B22222]"But sis.." [/colour]Haywire neighed as she watched Haymaker roll herself back up to her four feet and then dash off down the aisle again, leaving cans sprawled out all over the floor. [colour=#B22222]"I best git this mess cleaned up before mah sister gits in trouble agin'." [/colour]the rust coloured filly said as she began to gather up stray cans and slowly started to restack all the cans the way they were before.

I will be attending a yearly three day seminar starting on Thursday July 18 through Saturday July 20. The place where I will be staying has ZERO net access, so I will be away from Canterlot.com during this period of time.

Hi Gingerbreadspy! Wonderful app! All required fields filled and very well written. It's refreshing to me to see a unicorn mare who desires to perform 'hard labour' tasks! Excellent work!

Hi Dio! This app has a LOT of great elements in it! All required fields are filled, it's very well written and this is certainly an original character! Well done!

MisterRe, I just noticed a minor Application Rules violation. Users are only permitted to have one Ready status app and one WIP status app at the same time. You currently have two apps (this one and Mr. Re) that are set at 'Ready' status, so one of those apps will have to be moved back to WIP status until the remaining Ready app is approved. I do apologize, I should've noticed this earlier. This is not a major problem, but it does need to be addressed.

[colour=#0000FF]"You're right, Miss Carrot Top! We best git ya all ready ta check out before they run outta free Zap Apple jam!" [/colour]Hayseed neighed as he galloped to eagerly assist his new mare friend with her shopping. Meanwhile, Flam and Mr. Waddle wave goodbye to the departing Derpy Hooves. [colour=#FF8C00]"Goodbye Miss Hooves!" [/colour]the lanky unicorn stallion shouted as he waves his left front hoof in the air. [colour=#FF8C00]"I hope we'll meet again soon!"[/colour] [colour=#696969]"Goodbye Miss Hooves!" [/colour]added Mr. Waddle as he waved. [colour=#FF8C00]"Egad! Did you hear Filthy Rich, dear fellow? We better return to shopping before we lose out on a free jar of Zap Apple jam!"[/colour] [colour=#696969]"Quite right, Flam," [/colour]the older Earth stallion agreed as the two rushed off to shop. Outside, when Dr. Stable rushed up to their wagon, he spotted Haywire placing a cold compress on her older sister's head as she began to revive. [colour=#FF0000]"Ah! Miss Haymaker!" [/colour]Dr. Stable neighed, [colour=#FF0000]"and how are we feeling now?"[/colour] [colour=#800080]"About half in half," [/colour]Haymaker snorted. [colour=#800080]"YOU look fine, but I feel lousy!"[/colour] [colour=#B22222]"Now mind yur manners, sis," [/colour]Haywire said sternly, [colour=#B22222]"t'aint HIS fault ya swallered them thar sleepin' pills! Ya done that all yurself!"[/colour] [colour=#800080]"If I was ... at full strength... doc... I'd .... BELT YOU!"[/colour] [colour=#FF0000]"Now now, Miss Haymaker, let us not resort to violence," [/colour]the physician unicorn muttered as he shook with fear. The tension of the moment was broken by Filthy Rich's announcement. [colour=#800080]"OH HORSEFEATHERS! Time's runnin' out and I wanna git some of that free Zap Apple jam!" [/colour]the lanky red maned mare shouted as she jumped out of the cart. [colour=#B22222]"But sis, you ain't alright yet and besides that..."[/colour] [colour=#800080]"No time to argue with ya, Haywire! Gotta git movin'! I want some free jam!" [/colour]a determined Haymaker neighed as she galloped past Doctor Stable with such force, the bewildered doctor spun around like a top before coming to a slow stop in front of Haywire. [colour=#B22222]"Are ya ok, doc?"[/colour] [colour=#FF0000]"I think, I'm going to be sick," [/colour]the wobbly, dizzy Doctor Stable muttered as he staggered.

Hi MisterRe! Examining your app, it shows a lot of promise. All of the required fields are filled, that's a good thing. However, this app does seem to have quite a few grammatical errors in it. One example in this sentence: "On multiple occurrences, he tends to borrows these 'toys' with asking his parents and often this would get him in trouble." I think you meant to write "borrow these 'toys' WITHOUT asking" here, correct? Also, I feel the need to point out that one cannot produce ice cream using a whisk as their primary kitchen tool. To truly make homemade ice cream, churning is a must and this kind of churning motion would be extremely difficult to make with just a whisk. Now whipped cream can be produced with a whisk (and normally is by chefs) but not ice cream. And there are no 'trucks' in the WOE. The common rule of technology for WOE RP is that if we haven't seen it in the cartoon, then it doesn't exist. So, sadly, there would be no such thing as a 'ice cream truck' in Equestria. An ice cream WAGON? Yeah, that could exist, but not a truck per se. I would suggest that you reread this app very carefully, correct the grammatical errors and other things mentioned above. This is a great character concept, just needs a bit more work to make it acceptable in the WOE RP.

[colour=#8B4513]"Blimey! Ya think I'm tryin' ta trick ya?" [/colour]Mojo asked, surprised at his new friend's response before returning to his calm, cool demeanor. [colour=#8B4513]"Look Flax, I can see why you're so bummed out after dealin' with a pair of squares like the Flim Flam's. But I'm not like those two hooligans, pal. I'm Mojo, the Pony of Peace! Tryin' ta take advantage of other ponies ain't cool and robbin'm of their stuff is even more uncool. I'd never do that! Besides, like I told ya before, I don't own a farm, don't want one! I stay on me own family's farm when I'm not on the road, and I sell me family's produce and food items. All I was tryin' ta do is offer ya a helpin' hoof in sellin' your groovy health care items. Ya seem to be a bit down so I wanted ta try ta cheer ya up. That's all."[/colour]

Although Asteria's response disappointed Saddlesore, he smiled since the blue Earth stallion was expecting her to say something like this. He truly wanted to communicate with the lovely unicorn mare, and he wasn't going to give up trying. He thought hard to come up with what he believed would be an appropriate response. [colour=#0000FF]"Miss Stillheart, do you perceive that this evening's sky luminenance is of a bright or dimmer quality than the average night sky where you live? Of course, the varying degrees of moonlight are in direct relationship to the lunar tide schedule, which though predictable, are often subject to random weather patterns."[/colour]

Ok, this app looks very good to me! All of the required fields are filled and it's very well written. For an older foal, this char is deep (and we like that!). Good work!

Hi Corsair! I like the 'relaunch' on this character! App looks good to me, all the required fields are filled and it's very well written.

One question before I begin to evaluate your app, Palisade. You use the term "Foal (older)" to describe the char's age. I'm assuming you mean this pony is older than a pony like Pound or Pumpkin Cake but younger than Applebloom, Sweetie Belle or Scootaloo, am I correct?

Hearing AppleJack's reply jogged Granny Smith's memory. [colour=#00FF00]"Oh yeah! I shoudda knowed it! These here pears is from good ol' Pearywinkle!" [/colour]the elderly mare neighed. [colour=#006400]"Pearyvinkle?" [/colour]Uncle Apple Strudel asked, [colour=#006400]"I don't tink I've ever met dat pony."[/colour] [colour=#00FF00]"Pearywinkle ain't no pony, brother. It's a pear tree that out among our apple trees. Gotta admit, ol' Peary was sure scared at first, bein' around all them apple trees, but they welcomed him as part of the orchard family! Sure, we're all Apple folk on this farm, but that don't mean we can't allow other trees ta be here with us."[/colour] [colour=#006400]"Dat is a vonderba story, mein sister! Maybe vee vill find somepony who vill vant to buy dem!"[/colour] Apple Strudel pushed the bushel basket of pears aside and then brought more baskets of apples up for AppleJack to sell.

Saddlesore had couldn't of picked a better night for a moonlight stroll. The full moon was bright and commanding in the night sky. The many stars that dotted the heavens seemed to be out just for them! The blue Earth stallion had never taken the time to notice how lovely Princess Luna's nights could be! Perhaps he felt this way because of the lovely unicorn mare that he was sharing the evening with. As the two walked slowly down the path, Saddlesore looked up at Asteria. [colour=#0000FF]"Tell me, Miss Stillheart, what do you think of the night sky? Have you ever seen anything more lovely and wonderous in your entire life?"[/colour] Saddlesore was hoping that just for once, Asteria could display some raw emotions. He thought the world of her, even with her current demeanor, but the blue stallion was hoping that he could open a whole new outlook on life to the elegant unicorn mare.

Ms. Harshwhinney stood motionless for what seemed to be an eternity. The 'rebuke' she had received from Princess Cadance stunned the orange Earth mare to silence. What a terrible first impression she had made during the early hours of this convention! How would she live this down? With all the remaining courage she could muster, the blonde middle aged mare bowed respectfully once more before the two Princesses. [colour=#FF8C00]"I do humbly apologize, your majesties. I meant no offense to either of you, or this grand convention. Is there anything I can do for either of you to make up for my previous rudeness?"[/colour] Meanwhile, Louise LaMare and Tankena seemed to be getting along well with Cherry Berry and Carrot Top. [colour=#8B4513]"It's a pleasure to meet you both," [/colour]Louise said with a smile. [colour=#8B4513]"I'm a novelist living in Appleoosa now, wanted to live in a truly rustic frontier town that could give me more inspiration for my Pioneer times books, have you read any of them?"[/colour] [colour=#8B4513][colour=#008000]"Da, Comrade Carrot Top! I am Tankena! My family and I are metalsmiths, but what I love to create the most is inventions! There is much snowy days in Stalliongrad, so it gives much time for thinking and planning! I was hoping to have my latest invention ready to show off to all these mares at convention, but it had problems."[/colour][/colour] [colour=#8B4513][colour=#8B4513]"And what invention is that, Tankena?"[/colour][/colour] [colour=#8B4513][colour=#008000]"I was working on new kind of carriage that could move without being pulled or hitched. My parents wanted me to give up after my first five prototypes exploded, but I told them.."[/colour][/colour] [colour=#8B4513]"Exploded? Were you injured?"[/colour] [colour=#008000]"Nyet! Just cuts and scrapes, no big deal. I did bring other inventions with me, do you comrades want to see them? None will explode, I promise!"[/colour]

[colour=#0000FF]"Y'know, Miss Carrot Top," [/colour]Hayseed said with a shy smile, [colour=#0000FF]"I kin sure think of one lovely mare I'd be pleased ta use as a model fer whittlin' a big wooden pony with."[/colour] Suddenly, the farming Earth Pony blushed so brightly, it could be seen under his facial fur. Meanwhile, Flam was very pleased. Not only did his new friend Miss Derpy Hooves NOT hold his past against him, but the blonde Pegasus mare seemed to genuinely like his company. She even mention wanting to see his brother Flim too! As Doctor Stable looked confused and Mr. Waddle smiled, Flam walked up to the departing mare. [colour=#FF8C00]"Miss Hooves, you are a treasure, you gave my day such pleasure, and I hope to see you again, and bring my brother to meet my new FRIEND!!!!" [/colour]Flam sang out, adding a little dance to go with his homemade tune. [colour=#FF0000]"Hmph!" [/colour]Doctor Stable snorted. [colour=#FF0000]"I should've known there was nothing wrong with Derpy, well, nothing in my field of medicine."[/colour] [colour=#808080]"And what is THAT supposed to mean?" [/colour]Mr Waddle asked. [colour=#FF0000]"Well sir, I am trained in medicine, not psychiatry. It's obvious that Miss Derpy Hooves has some sort of mental condition that.."[/colour] [colour=#FF8C00]"SLANDER! Cease this slander of my dear friend this instant!" [/colour]Flam growled as he faced the physician unicorn. [colour=#FF8C00]"It may be true that Miss Hooves is quite unique, but there's no crime in that! I happen to think she's wonderful, and I don't need a stethoscope or a medical license to say that!"[/colour] [colour=#FF0000]"Why don't you stick to squeezing apples and leave the practice of medicine to us professionals?" [/colour]Doctor Stable asked gruffly. [colour=#FF0000]"And speaking of medical duties, I must attend to a young sleeping mare outside. Hopefully, that pill she accidentally swallowed has worn off by now, good day to you all."[/colour] Mr Waddle shook his head as he watched Doctor Stable leave the building.[colour=#FF0000] [/colour]